Talk:Louise McKinney/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 19:08, 21 August 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this one. --Vacant0 (talk) 19:08, 21 August 2022 (UTC)

@Ingenuity: On hold until these issues get fixed. Vacant0 (talk) 20:28, 21 August 2022 (UTC)

@Vacant0: I've done all of these suggestions, except for splitting the web references into their own section. I'm not exactly sure how to go about doing that -- are there any articles that can be used as an example? — Ingenuity (talk • contribs) 01:29, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

@Ingenuity At any rate, this is not one of the GA criteria and shouldn't be required to pass the GAN. -- asilvering (talk) 05:46, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

It's optional, and as the user above said, it's not a part of criteria (it's mentioned in MOS:FNNR). I'll promote this to GA. Vacant0 (talk) 10:12, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Comments

General

• Infobox: occupation parameter "Women's rights activist and politician" → "{{hlist|Women's rights activist|politician}}

 Done

• Lede: née Crummy → {{nee|Crummy}}

 Done

• • Add the fact that she supported eugenics and stricter immigration laws.

 Done

• Political career: Famous Five is first mentioned here so it should be wiki-linked. Unlink the one in the "Persons Case".

 Done

• Categories: Remove "Canadian feminists", and two human rights activist categories. Feminism is not backed up by sources in the article, add "Canadian women's rights activists" instead, a more broad term that is correct and accepted by sources.

 Done

Images

• Add alt text.

 Done

• Properly licensed, no objections to this.

Sources

• The only current source in the infobox can be moved to the "Involvement in the Woman's Christian Temperance Union" section, where the fact is mentioned in the text. It should also be filled out like this:
  • {{cite book|last1=Normandin|first1=Pierre|last2=Normandin|first=A. Léopold|title=The Canadian Parliamentary Companion|publisher=Citizen Print. and Publishing Company|year=1921|url=https://books.google.com/books?id=dGQtAQAAMAAJ&q=%22M.+March+10+%2C+1896+%2C+to+James+McKinney+%22}}

I've removed this entirely, as it doesn't have any information that The Canadian parliamentary guide doesn't, and I also don't have full access to that source.

• Reference style is inconsistent. Under the "References" section, create a "Web sources" subsection that would include non-book sources that are present in the article. Sources that do not mention the author of the text should use the "|ref={{sfnRef}}" parameter. Example:
  • <ref>{{Cite web |ref={{sfnRef|Alberta Online Encyclopedia|2010}}|title=The Famous Five - Louise McKinney - Private Life |url=http://www.abheritage.ca/famous5/achievements/mckinney_private_life.html |archive-url=http://wayback.archive-it.org/2217/20101208165054/http://www.abheritage.ca/famous5/achievements/mckinney_private_life.html |archive-date=8 December 2010 |access-date=30 June 2022 |website=Alberta Online Encyclopedia}}</ref>
• As far as I can tell, her death date is not backed by Ref 20.

That statement was backed up by the previous reference -- moved to the correct location.

• I'd avoid the Candian Encyclopedia, the copyvio detector detects 40.5% similarity between this article and their website.

Looks like it's mainly picking up smaller phrases (eg. "the Supreme Court of Canada"). I'll rewrite a couple of the more closely phrased sentences.

• Ref 21 redirects to a dead URL.

Fixed. Looks like that was a problem with Template:DFHD, so I've linked the correct URL directly.

• Fill out and archive the rest of the references.

 Done

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