Talk:MDNA (album)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: HĐ (talk · contribs) 12:43, 14 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will be reviewing this article within a week's time. — HĐ (talk) 12:43, 14 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Overall: The article is in pretty good shape and ready for GA. Some points need to be addressed nonetheless:

Lead

"MDNA consisted of both introspective as well as upbeat songs" → unclear contrast. Upbeat songs can be introspective sometimes
"Lyrically the record explored themes such as partying, love for music, infatuation, as well as heartbreak, revenge and separation" → comma + any other way to shorten this?
"The media noted that no further promotion was done for the record." → unnecessary
downtempo is a specific genre. I assume you want to refer to balladic songs here?
- How does it look after a c/e? —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 20:50, 20 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"films, food, and other topics" → What other topics? Either clarify or mention "films and food" only
- Actually removed it altogether. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 20:50, 20 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Recording

Wikilink to "recording" is unnecessary
"outside always" → "always outside" sounds better imo
"European sensibilities" → you mean common interests in food and films? This part sounds a bit off
- Rewrote. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 20:50, 20 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Music

" the work with Solveig" → I'd prefer "the songs/tracks". "The work" sounds off to me
"It featured cheer-leading chants between the verses" → present tense
"Madonna daily life" → possessive pronoun
I notice a lot of past tense sentences here (Madonna sang, featured...). I recommend changing them all to present tenses
- I agree and rephrased. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 20:50, 20 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

I'd recommend trimming the first paragraph, which strikes as a quote farm
"Orbit's production received positive feedback from critics." → You can cut this and directly say "Orbit's production received positive feedback from ABC..."; "critics" is overtly used

— HĐ (talk) 09:04, 16 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing HD. Will start by today :) —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:33, 18 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hey @HĐ: all addressed. Please go ahead with her assessment. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 20:50, 20 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I see no further issues. Passing this for GA status. Well done, especially since you have waited so long for this to be reviewed :) — HĐ (talk) 02:18, 21 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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