Talk:Maine-class battleship/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 22:02, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
- No DABs, external links good.
- Images appropriately licensed.
- Infobox:
- What kind of engine? Link it as well. Move boilers to power line and link.
- Done
- Better, but I've changed it to clarify that they're steam engines
- Thanks
- Better, but I've changed it to clarify that they're steam engines
- Done
- Watch the rounding in your conversions, both in the infobox and in the main body.
- Think I've gotten them all
- Not so much; the armor para and torpedo diameter in the armament para.
- Done now
- Not so much; the armor para and torpedo diameter in the armament para.
- Think I've gotten them all
- trivial difference in length between infobox and main body.
- Fixed
- What kind of engine? Link it as well. Move boilers to power line and link.
- It's a little confusing when you talk about the increase in speed and only then mention the two contending designs.
- I'm not quite sure what you mean - it makes sense to me, but then I wrote it. See if what I've added makes it any better.
- Yeah, it was just confusing in that there was no mention of designs submitted by builders for them earlier.
- I'm not quite sure what you mean - it makes sense to me, but then I wrote it. See if what I've added makes it any better.
- She had a crew of 40 officers and 521 enlisted men, which increased to 779–813 officers and men. When and which ship?
- Conway's doesn't say
- Fair enough, but "she" is still a problem.
- Oops, didn't even see that.
- Fair enough, but "she" is still a problem.
- Conway's doesn't say
- Which one had the Niclausse boilers?
- Good catch - I think that got lost in rewriting that sentence one too many times.
- Capitalize Whitehead and add |adj=on to the template for the warhead weight.
- Done
- The belt was 8 in (203 mm) elsewhere, reduced to 4 in (100 mm) on the bottom edge. Perhaps an "and" instead of the comma?
- Another effect of too many rewrites, I suspect.
- Link to and capitalize West Coast.
- Done
- I'm surprised that there isn't anything useful in Reilly & Scheina on these ships.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:02, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
- Truth be told I haven't looked at it - there no doubt is more information to include, but I figured the article should be sufficient for GA as is - would surely be necessary for A/FA, though, and I might someday have the time and inclination to get them there. Parsecboy (talk) 12:09, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
- I figured it was something like that; I'm not going to hold my breath given your new time suck, but your assessment isn't wrong.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:26, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
- Truth be told I haven't looked at it - there no doubt is more information to include, but I figured the article should be sufficient for GA as is - would surely be necessary for A/FA, though, and I might someday have the time and inclination to get them there. Parsecboy (talk) 12:09, 15 July 2015 (UTC)