Why is "The two men got along very well, dining at Trader Vic's in Oakland" releveant? Was it a regular or frequent occurence? Please clarify.
It establishes the personal relationship between the two, which becomes important later on. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
" Lady Elizabeth Cockcroft who had died the year before" - the way this is written, it implies that they may have been more children, which there were not.
I don't follow this. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
Omitting the comma from " alongside Timothy Cockcroft, the infant son of Sir John and Lady Elizabeth Cockcroft, who had died the year before." implies that there were more children than the one who died.--GilderienChat|List of good deeds 18:25, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
I added the comma; is it okay now? Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:32, 12 June 2013 (UTC)