Talk:Mass Effect 2: Arrival/GA1
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 10:30, 8 September 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- "$6.99 USD " - repetition; how about "US$ 6.99"
- "and elite human soldier " - do you mean "an"?
- "and the fact that the pack mostly consists of linear combat sequences, " - perhaps "and too many linera combat sequences" or similar. The main issue is "the fact that the"; does not flow well
- "still praiseworthy" - I would remove "still" as you only mentioned story and sequences
- " in order to progress" - could be just "to progress"
- "Unlike most of the missions, Arrival introduces a new mission " - repetition of "mission". It is a bit confusing, so suggest replacing one of the words
- "a deep cover agent" - what does "deep" mean here?
- Can you explain that Shephard "has" two genders?
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall: A few minor suggestions and issues.--Kürbis (✔) 10:32, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Thank you for your review -- much appreciated. I've addressed the issues you brought up. Let me know if there's anything else. --Niwi3 (talk) 10:59, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks. Pass the article. Regards.--Kürbis (✔) 17:25, 15 September 2012 (UTC)