Talk:Mathematics and architecture/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

This is something new to me and a truly interesting topic. Will snatch this! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on.

Lead

• "Buildings" is linked twice. Do we really need a link for this? Even if this is an architecture-related article?

Removed one.

• " Islamic architecture" is also linked twice

Done.

• One may not understand spatial forms at once.

Tweaked wording; not really avoidable in architecture.

• from the Pythagoreans onwards How long ago would that be?

Done.

• You may link "mausoleum", "hyperbolic"

Done.

• conveying a message about Hindu cosmology Leaves the reader wondering what the message would be. Could you add a word or two on that? Else remove it and mention it only in the main text.

Done; the word is already in the main text.

• What does "secular" convey here? In whose opinion are they so?

Removed.

• I wonder if this needs AE or BE. We have instances of both in the article. An FAC issue, though ...

Let's leave it.

• Ancient Rome "A" needs no caps if "ancient Egypt/Greece" don't do either. Same in "Connected fields" section

Let's use Title Case throughout.

• At the end of the nineteenth century Put it in either words or digits throughout the article. Elsewhere you say 21st, not words.

Let's do words throughout.

Connected fields

• I think this section should be called "Connection between fields"

We are in "Maths and Architecture", so we are talking about fields connected to that.

• Michael Ostwald and Kim Williams Who are they? You can add the author info from the cited source.

Glossed.

• connected, architecture I think we need a semicolon or hyphen here

Reworded.

• architecture being a profession concerned with the practical matter of making buildings, mathematics being the pure study of number and other abstract objects I think we can use "while on the other hand" or something to bring out the contrast more effectively. Commas seem lackluster.

Reworded.

• being the pure study of number Number"s"?

Number is right. Linked.

• the extra syllabus became the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy Should this rather be "the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy became the extra syllabus"?

Done.

• among architects, namely to be Colon?

Done.

• Link antiquity, geometry (only at first mention, presently linked at the second one), grammar, logic

Done.

Vitruvius

• I think conversion templates should be used wherever possible throughout "Harmonious spatial forms"

Done.

• The influential Ancient Roman architect Vitruvius Vitruvius should be identified in the earlier section.

I think he's quite well defined there by what he said.

• such as a temple depended on two qualities I think we should say "depends". It is a general truth in Vitruvius's opinion, we are merely stating that.

Done.

• on two qualities, symmetria and proportion I think "proportion" should come before "Symmetria". That is alphabetical and also the order in which you put the definitions.

Done.

• Basilica at Fano Links?

Done.

• firmness, usefulness and delight Could these be discussed in an alphabetical order?

This is the order described by Vitruvius.

• What is an "oculus"?

Linked. It's already glossed as "to let in light".....

• There are seven types of room...two squares If both refs. 26 and 27 support this quote then both should be placed just before the quote.

Done.

Twentieth century

• Too common to be linked: circular, nature

Done.

• "Modern Architecture" does not need italics

Done.

• Guggenheim Museum, Bilbao Links?

Done.

• leading architects Such as?

Reworded.

Take some rest, I am bringing more! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 10:48, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Religious principles

• Vaastu Shastra, the ancient Indian canons of architecture and town planning, employ symmetrical drawings I think "employs" sounds right. Shastra is singular

Done.

• Who are Ifrah and Jackson?

Glossed.

• Virupaksha Temple at Hampi (from 7th century onwards) I think you should write "built in the 7th century"

Done.

• about the tallest, central, tower The latter comma is not needed

Yes it is, it brackets the gloss 'central'.

• dwelling-place of Lord Shiva "the abode" would do better.

Done.

• Who is George Markowsky? (Ancient Greece)

Glossed.

• or to the pleasure of the Pythagoreans 4²:6²:9² May be "or, as Pythagoreans may prefer, 4²:6²:9² sounds more encyclopedic.

Said 'delight', with ref. It's well documented that the Pythagoreans delighted in numbers and ratios.

• The Parthenon is considered By whom? Beware of the taggers!

Done, but there are a million sources for this.

• What is the golden rectangle?

Linked. More golden ratio stuff, unfortunately.

• More recent authors Such as? Is Markowsky an example?

Yes, and Salingaros.

• Who is Antonio Fernandez-Puertas?

Glossed.

• Can Hispano- be linked?

Linked Al-Andalus.

• The Court of the Lions is bracketed by the Hall of Two Sisters and the Hall of the Abencerrajes Any linking possible?

Done.

• and a strong aesthetic based on symmetry and harmony Is something missing here?

No.

Sorry, took "aesthetic" as an adjective. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 12:09, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

• representing paradise May be considered an overstatement.

Added a representative ref. Again, could easily find a hundred.

• A foreign term, "Darwaza-i rauza" should be in italics

Done.

• Koch and Barraud?

Glossed.

• Koch and Barraud, analysing these in 2006 --> In a 2006 analysis, Koch and Barraud

Dropped the date, it's in the ref.

• In the last para of Christian architecture, convert 90 tons

Done, but what a hideous result.

• Only a few duplinks in Mathematical decoration: Islamic buildings, Alhambra, fractal

Removed, but I wonder if these weren't useful here.

• In Defence

• Duplink: Vincenzo Scamozzi

Yes, it's a dup but I wonder if it isn't worth it here (it's allowed), as he's not well known and it's a long way from the other link.

• mid-15th and nineteenth centuries Contrasting ways to put numbers

Good catch.

• In Environmental goals

• Does cucumber need a link?

Probably.

OK, no harm Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 12:27, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

• "subterranean" may be linked.

Chiswick Chap I wonder if you missed this one. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 15:39, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Done, and yes I'd missed it! Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:54, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Very well then, this article deserves to be Good now. I promote this! This is a fantastic job, Chiswick Chap! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 15:56, 2 March 2016 (UTC)