Talk:Mi Plan/GA1

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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 16:57, 17 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article. Novice7 (talk) 16:57, 17 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

DAB/EL Check:
- No DAB links
- There are a few redirect links and a dead link [1]

Infobox and lead

All the recording locations in the infobox makes it really long. Can you move the locations to Credits section?
Mi Plan (Spanish: My Plan) is the fourth studio album by Canadian recording artist Nelly Furtado and the first she has released in Spanish. – I feel splitting to two sentences would give a better flow.
Album was produced primarily by Furtado – "The" album was produced..
with others contributions made by James Bryan, Lester Mendez, – "other contributions"?
[...] and was later a certified platinum Latin album by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) – poor wording
The album won a Latin Grammy for Best Female Pop Vocal Album in 2010. – re-write to something like "At the 11th Annual Latin Grammy Awards, Mi Plan recieved the award for the Best Female Pop Vocal Album."
Two further singles came from the album – replace "came" with something like "were released"
The album was further supported by her 2010 Mi Plan Tour, her first tour reaching Latin America. – could be written better
Mention the title of the remix album.
I feel the lead could be expanded a bit to include information about the album's conception (or inspiration).

Production

I don't see how this section is related to production. There's nothing on how the songs were produced, what technique was used etc... Maybe just "Background"?
Furtado began working with guitarist and producer James Bryan on "My Plan", for a new possible English language album. – "new possible English album"? Please rewrite the sentence.
She said she would try to write songs in English and then in Portuguese but that she did not feel inspired. – She said to whom? Also, poor language.
She mentioned that fellow Canadian singer-songwriter Alex Cuba suggested that they try writing the lyrics in Spanish and then he would go on to write the melodies – again, to whom? I can see that it's Kuwait Times and MTV, so mention them.
After approving of the idea, she said that she, Cuba and Bryan started "really organically writing songs" in Spanish. I feel reported form of speech does not give a good flow. Change it.
"Mi Plan" featured Cuba on vocals – It still does, so it should be "features".
According to Cuba, the three got together five times between September 2008 and February 2009 and wrote nine songs, six of which made it onto the album. – I don't think the number of times they met is significant here. Crop that part out.
The section is a bit short. Is there anyway that it can be expanded?

Content

You must add "In an interview with..." to the opening sentence.
Mi plan and Mi Plan inconsistency.
She also claimed.. – WP:SAY?
Furtado explained that she decided she wanted to perform in Spanish because she did not follow commercial or sales trends – not clear
The following sentences (She said that writing songs in Spanish felt "very liberating", singing in Spanish because, as she put it, "In English) seem like they fit in the section above this.
Furtado proclaimed, is about – proclaimed?
Many sentences carry the same issue I noted on point 1 of Content. Fix them.
This section doesn't cover the whole album? Also, too many quotes, in my opinion.

Critical reception

A few instances of "claimed" spotted.
In a positive review, Stephen Thomas.. – rearrange the words in the sentence.
Author is missing for Billboard review
Many reviews lack author.
"asserted" – again WP:SAY
The writer compared it to her previous release, Loose – mention the year of Loose, if possible.
The New York Times and Yahoo! Music UK reviews are not expanded?
You are quoting too much. Try and paraphrase a few quotes.

Chart performance

Inconsistent use of US and U.S.
According to Nielson SoundScan, the album was the highest selling Latin pop album in 2009. – album "of" 2009
The next sentence should be moved and placed near the chart entry sentence.
There, the album was certified gold for shipping over 15,000 units – by whom?
At the 11th Annual Latin Grammy Awards, Furtado won the award for Best Female Pop Vocal Album. – Furtado didn't win it, Mi Plan did.

Promotion

"Silencio" was digitally released as a promotional single only for U.E. from Rhapsody – what is U.E.?
a 12-track album entitled, "Mi Plan Remixes" was released – it should be italicized, not enclosed in quotes.
single from Mi Plan and Mi Plan Remixes on October 26, 2010.[37]Before – space after reference.
Before she began touring, Furtado appeared at various award shows and small venues, performing in places such as the 2009 ALMA Awards. – re-write
Furtado also appeared at the Latin Grammy Awards of 2010, – you say 11th Annual Latin Grammy Awards and Latin Grammy Awards of 2010. Be consistent.
For the tour, Furtado asked her fans for help choosing the setlist, asking which songs should be on the show.[44] – poor language.
The concert in Santiago was one of the firsts after the 2010 Chile earthquake that happened 3 weeks before. – same as above.
"VIP Pocket Show" – unnecessary quotes.
appeared in the reality show program Big Brother Brasil 10 from Rede Globo, the country's leading channel. – italicize Big Brother Brasil 10 and re-write the sentence.
The last two sentences are unsourced.

Singles

Unsourced release date of "Manos al aire". Also, lead says "Manos al Aire" and this section says "Manos al aire". Consistency?
Use of acharts is discouraged.
It was released as a download single on December 18, 2009 – What is a download single? Maybe "It was released as a digital single on...."?
"Bajo otra luz" was digitally released from iTunes in Canada and Mexico on August 31, 2009.[ – "released from"? Please change it.
It premiered as the final single from the album on US radio in early May 2010 – source?
It was the least successful single from the album, not charting anywhere. – any source for this? I know it's the least successful, but atleast a hitparade source suffices.

Tracklisting

The hidden track can be merged with the template and can be noted.

Charts and certifications

Chile certification reference leads to a dead link. Also, I feel the website is a fansite?
I suggest you remove the sales figures, unless a solid source is obtained.

Release history

Move this section and place it below Charts section.

References

Many refs are not properly formatted. For example: Online sources are italicized (MTV, domingolatino.co.nz), some are missing publisher (Los Angeles Times → Tribune Company), some print sources are not correctly named (National Post). Also, the way refs are formatted is inconsistent. Some say "Posted: (date)" while others just show the date. Some miss authors, some miss accessdates or dates, some unreliable sources (celestrellas.com) etc. References need a big makeover.
Media: File:Nelly Furtado - Mi Plan.jpg needs a more direct source (maybe a link to Amazon.com).

The article is not in a good state, and I suggest a WP:COPYEDIT too. On Hold for seven days. Novice7 (talk) 10:33, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: The sales/shipments come from this article. In addition, each of the main sites for the country's music industry that are referenced provide a guide on what a gold/platinum means in each country and year. Magiciandude (talk) 17:21, 26 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, okay. But, two are already included in the Chart performance section. The rest can be too. In my opinion, the table is a bit confusing.

It has been seven days and many issues still remain. I'm sorry but I have to fail this article for now. Novice7 (talk) 05:31, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]