Talk:Mimi Smith/GA1

GA Reassessment

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GA Sweeps: On hold

As part of the WikiProject Good Articles, we're doing Sweeps to determine if the article should remain a Good article. I believe the article currently meets the majority of the criteria and should remain listed as a GA. However, in reviewing the article, I have found there are several issues that need to be addressed.

There are a few dead links that should be fixed. The Internet Archive may be able to help.
~~There are a few dabs that should be fixed.~~
Although it is not required by GA criteria (so it will not be a requirement for the review), it would be beneficial to add alt text to the images. See WP:ALT for assistance.
The article makes use of three non-free images, and I think only one or two of them are necessary for the article. I'd recommend dropping File:Lennon Stanley Parkes.jpg since it does not cover the subject. For the other two images of Smith, perhaps choose one for the infobox and drop the other. I'm not going to be too picky since this is only GA, but I don't think that the images' use can be justified if the article heads up to FAC at some point.
~~I have tagged File:Mimi Smith and John Lennon.JPG to be reduced in size. Although not a requirement for this review, it would be beneficial to reduce the non-free image's size.~~
The lead needs to be expanded to better summarize the article. See WP:LEAD for guidelines.
Throughout the article there are several one or two-sentence paragraphs. Either expand on these or incorporate them into another paragraph.
"According to Lennon, the Stanley family once owned the whole of Woolton village." It may be best to start off this section with a different sentence, as well as clarify where Woolton village is for readers who may be unaware.
"Despite this, Mimi wore sensible dresses, and always looked as if she was on her way to a weekly garden club meeting." This sounds like a quote, if it is, add quotation marks and indicate who said it. Otherwise, it would best to reword the statement.
~~"Mimi and "John"" Is there are a reason John is in quotation marks? In addition, the subsection within it should be renamed as it is similar to this title.~~
"Mimi phoned the Oxford Street Maternity Hospital that evening and was told that Julia had given birth to a boy" Although it may be obvious to many, it would be beneficial to mention John's name here as some readers may skip the lead and jump straight to this section.
"He called her one night from New York asking her to check behind the bush for a surprise...The bush had to be cut down as it was overgrown and there stuck to wall was the plaque saying" Music's all right John, but you'll never make a living out of it"." The ellipses is not necessary. The spacing should also be fixed for the initial quotation mark.
~~The subsections within "Lennon's girlfriends and wives" don't need to include her name again, just list the names.~~ Also should it just be named "Lennon's wives"?
Some of the citations only consist of a title. Expand on these to include parameters such as author, date, website, etc. The citation templates at WP:CITET may be helpful.

I will leave the article on hold for seven days, but if progress is being made and an extension is needed, one may be given. If no progress is made, the article may be delisted, which can then later be renominated at WP:GAN. I'll contact all of the main contributors and related WikiProjects so the workload can be shared. Once the above issues are addressed, I'll help do a final copyedit of the article. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 (talk • contrib) 06:39, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm quite surprised no one has jumped in to the rescue this article. As you can see, I've made some technical tweaks, but, sadly, I do not know this article very well, and cannot address some of the issues above (e.g., the "garden club meeting" sentence). I hope someone who is more familiar with it will post here soon. - I.M.S. (talk) 15:59, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Good job addressing some of the issues. I have struck the completed ones above. Since some progress has been made, I'll leave the article on hold for another week. It would be great if progress could be made on the other tasks so the article could remain a GA. Again, if there are any questions, please let me know. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 (talk • contrib) 20:25, 27 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA Sweeps: Delisted

The article has been on hold for another week and the remaining issues were not addressed. As a result I have delisted the article as it still has a way to go before meeting the GA criteria. Continue to improve the article, addressing the issues above. Once they are addressed, please renominate the article at WP:GAN. I look forward to seeing the further improvement of the article, and don't hesitate to contact me if you need assistance with any of these. If you disagree with this review, a community consensus can be reached at WP:GAR. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 (talk • contrib) 21:02, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]