Talk:Mr. Monk Gets Jury Duty/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:35, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

I can take a look at this! — GhostRiver 14:35, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• The second sentence seems a little sparse; I'd say the series follows the "adventures" or "antics" of Monk and Teeger
  • I think it was okay, but added "the adventures of" for clarity
• "With influences from the film 12 Angry Men, the episode was written by Peter Wolk." → "Peter Wolk wrote the episode, which drew influences from the film 12 Angry Men."
  • Done.
• Link Los Angeles
  • Per MOS:OVERLINK, it's not recommended to link major geographic features.

Plot

• When you remove the parenthetical actor names, the plot clocks in at 460 words, just above the threshold set at MOS:TVPLOT, and it will need to be trimmed accordingly.
  • Wow, you made me realize how outdated I am. Because my main edits on Monk episodes were in 2015–16; and at that time it could between 200 and 500 words. I'll rewrite it.
• Link drug lord and extradition
  • Common words, so not really necessary per MOS:OVERLINK.
• Reintroduce Monk as a PI
  • Ok.
• "who has been accused of stabbing"
  • Done.

Production

• "fourth directing credit in the series"
  • Added.
• "after writing" → "following"
  • Changed.
• Link defense attorney
  • Common word.
• "had also written for"
  • Ok.
• "coutroom-themed" → "courtroom-themed"
  • Fixed.
• Pipe "Chinatown" to Chinatown, San Francisco
  • Linked.
• How was the scene rewritten?
  • It's not clear in the source. To avoid original research, I've removed it and added a simpler information.
• "Juror No. 4 Mr. Cobb" → "the juror "Mr. Cobb""
  • Ok
• "(Juror No. 3 in the film)" → "who portrayed Juror No. 3 in the film"
  • Reworded.
• Pipe "panning shot" to Panning (camera)
  • Ok. Worth it.

Reception

• The Futon Critic source also mentions that it was the second-highest-viewed cable series of the week, behind the second episode of The Sopranos
  • That's indeed an interesting information. Added.
• Without access to the source, the Green Bay Press Gazette fan poll seems trivial; Green Bay is neither terribly large, nor is it important to the TV industry; a quiz of Green Bay citizens who happen to be Monk fans is different from a national poll conducted in Green Bay
  • This article is available at ProQuest here in The Wikipedia Library Bundle. You should have access to it. Regarding its importance, I don't really completely disagree with you, although I think it has some relevance. In fact, it's pretty clear that it's just about a limited poll; it would be grosse if, for example, it read like "some fans elected it..." but without any context.
• "A TV Guide's reviewer" → "A reviewer for TV Guide"
• shows the "obvious" care for the last four episodes of the season received Awkwardly phrased; I think the "for" in "care for the" is out of place
  • Indeed. Removed the "the"

References

• References are properly formatted (no bare links)
• Per extensive discussions summarized at WP:ALLMUSIC, AllMovie isn't the best source for anything outside of reviews. Page 203 of the official episode guide shows that Belgrader directed this episode, and the rest of the book can be used to establish the other ones eh directed
  • Are you able to see its preview? It's not available for me. If you could check the pages for the other episodes, I would welcome it.

General comments

• One image, relevant and in the public domain
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio detector shows one mirror site, nothing of concern

That's all I've got! TV episodes are always nice because they're such short articles. Putting on hold now; ping me once you're finished, or if you have any questions! — GhostRiver 14:56, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver Mostly done. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 03:38, 1 October 2021 (UTC)

Gabriel Yuji While I disagree with some of your opinions on common terms (particularly extradition), it's ultimately a minor point. With regards to the book source, I used "Belgrader" as a search term and was able to verify that he was listed as the director of the other three episodes mentioned in the article. One last prose/grammar issue: 50,000 fans of Green Bay can be read as "fans of the city of Green Bay"; should be reworded as 50,000 Monk fans from Green Bay, Wisconsin. — GhostRiver 14:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver Reworded the suggested phrase. Reduced the plot. I still can't search inside the book; if you are willing to access it and do the proper changes, I'll be grateful. Thanks, Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:30, 3 October 2021 (UTC)

Changed that one ref and caught a typo that I must have missed earlier ("12nd" → "12th"). Otherwise, looks good to go! — GhostRiver 14:49, 3 October 2021 (UTC)