Talk:Mrs. California/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 18:27, 6 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this one soon. Ruby 2010/2013 18:27, 6 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

You use "episode" too much in the first lead paragraph; change it up
""Mrs. California" received a range of reviews from critics from positive to mixed responses and was ranked the fifth best episode of the season, so far. " Seems like sloppy writing (from...from), and you should indicate who ranked it the 5th best episode
Wikilink bench-press
""Mrs California" features a guest appearance from Maura Tierney who is set to play Robert California's wife, Susan California.[4]" "Is set" is past tense; she already guest starred
I prefer to split the production section into 3 paragraphs for ease of reading (writing, guest stars, and web clips)
Reviews: ""Mrs. California" received a range of reviews from critics from positive to mixed responses." Sloppy writing again
"Despite this he complimented the cold open" Why "despite this"? (Note I haven't seen the episode). You could actually delete this sentence, as you already mention multiple reviewers liked the cold open
IMDb is not a reliable source
Ref 16: Unitalicise TV by the Numbers, Hollywood.com,
Italicise New York and TV Guide
It's The Hollywood Reporter
Any cultural refs?

Address above comments and respond here when you have finished. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 22:21, 6 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues. In addition, I added a completely new section about Cultural References. You might check that out!--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:32, 7 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

To maintain consistency with other Office episodes, you can just have one solid production section (Above, I only meant make three separate paragraphs, not sub-sections). Otherwise the article looks good. Pass for GA. Nice work, Ruby 2010/2013 03:21, 7 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]