Talk:Mxmtoon/GA1

GA Review

Passed. SL93 (talk) 02:04, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: SL93 (talk) 19:26, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 20:13, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

SL93 Would you be able to indicate which records regarding her extended plays, singles, and featured artist songs you'd like referenced? Also is this just me or did the second and twenty-first references automatically go to a Wayback Machine page?? Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 20:33, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Rebestalic It didn't on my computer until Gehenna1510 edited it a few minutes ago. Now it does so I made an update to those. I will extend what needs to be referenced. Please just give me a moment. SL93 (talk) 20:35, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Wow, this is a joint effort! Thank you for making it all happen Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 20:40, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

You're welcome. SL93 (talk) 22:27, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The article looks mostly fine, but there are a few issues.

The lead is too short for how much information is in the article. Try to summarize all of the most important things, such as information about her career including her awards.

The second reference is a dead link. Try running it through the Wayback machine.

Has been taken care of by another editor. SL93 (talk) 20:30, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Saying that she began writing in a confessional "emotionally embodied style" appears to be original research. The source doesn't come close to saying that. However, it does mention how it is in a "confessional" style.

The 21st reference is a dead link. It might appear through the Wayback machine.

Has been taken care of by another editor. SL93 (talk) 20:30, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"She released her first graphic novel, The Adventures of Mxmtoon: The Masquerade, in October 2019." needs to be referenced.

"Maia has been credited with having an "endearingly intimate presence". - This needs in-text attribution. Please see WP:INTEXT.

"The Adventures Of mxmtoon: Dawn & Dusk" needs to be referenced.

'Plum Blossom Tour (2019)" needs to be referenced.

Some of the information under the "Extended plays", "Singles", and "As featured artist" subsections needs to be referenced.

The info involving "released", "label" and "format" for Dawn, Dawn (The Edits), Dusk (The Edits), and True Colors (from Life Is Strange) need citations. All of the individual singles, except for "The Sideline" which has a reference, needs citations along with the release years. "(featuring Carly Rae Jepsen)" beside "OK on Your Own" needs a citation. For "As featured artist", the single names, release years, and who else they feature need to be referenced. SL93 (talk)

Rebestalic If it makes it easier, I wouldn't mind you removing the "released", "label" and "format" fields to make it easier. For the singles, I normally try to just find an online web page that lists all of them together. An artist page with her work would be perfect, like if she has one on Apple Music for example. SL93 (talk) 20:52, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Another tip - Some of the singles, such "Mona Lisa", "Sad Disco", "Victim of Nostalgia", and "Coming of Age" have citations in the article body. You could copy those references to the singles list below. SL93 (talk) 21:13, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

SL93 this is all so helpful! My gratitude Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 22:24, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

New section to avoid clutter

SL93 I've followed through with all your recommendations! For the singles list, would it be acceptable to do what I've done and just leave an entire column with references?

Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 01:14, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Rebestalic That works. It took a while to look through your changes because I have been back and forth on Wikipedia. SL93 (talk) 02:02, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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