Talk:Nikolai Tikhonov/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
Section by section review[edit]
Lead
- Done Confusing: "As many like him Tikhonov climbed up the Soviet hierarchy through the 'industrial ladder'; by 1963 he had become Deputy Chairman of the Gosplan."
- GDone rammar issue + change the 1963 office to a broader statement of his climb. "From peasant to Vice Premier" as an example.
- Besides that, good!
Early life and career
- Done I'm unsure of the policy on this, but maybe remove the red links.
- Done Comma after '1930 to 1941'
- Done That same sentence is a run-on
- Done "that he met" in first sentence of first paragraph
- Why? Change link of All-Union Communists to labeling it 'Bolshevik' Party for clarity sake.
- Done Comma after 'As a director'
- Done Call 'Great Patriotic War' what it is - WWII.
- Done Last sentence of second paragraph - change to "...became a member of the Central Committee."
Done *First sentence of last paragraph, change to "When Alexi Kosygin, the then current First Deputy, was on sick leave..."
- Done "...was elected a candidate member of the..."
Premiership (1980-85)
- Done Need cite for "not producing enough grain".
- Done Need cite for "Tikhonov acknowledged..." sentence's claim
- Working Complete a copyedit for this section. Lots of commas missing.
- Done Last sentence here seems extraneous - suggesting removal.
- Maybe put a picture here to make it easier to read the long block of text.
Later life and death (1985-97)
- Done Need a cite to claim that his resignation was "forced"
- Yes Is "Secretaryship" a word?
- Done The view was strengthened - fix in 2nd sentence.
- Done Need cite for the 'hermit' quote.
- Done Comma after "According to Time magazine..."
- Done Change title of section to "Later life and death". Removing the years are key because of the later references to things built in his honor; all of which happened after he died.
Refs/Biblio.
- Done The Zemtsov source has spacing issues between the title of the book and the publisher name.
Concluding Thoughts
- Article copyedit is recommended.
- I've requested a copyedit from the Guild of Copy Editors; is it okay to put this article on hold until a outside editor decides to copyedit the article? --TIAYN (talk) 10:21, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
- Lots of sentences seem to run-on.
You have a week's time to resolve the concerns before a decision on promotion will be made. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 18:02, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
- I just read through the article again. Much better and greater clarity! :) Would you like me to now reassess it for promotion or are you still working on it? Lord Roem (talk) 17:55, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks! :D I'm more or less finished, if you feel it meets the GA criteria please reassess it! As you already know I'm waiting for the Guild of Copyeditors to copyedit this article; nothing more! --TIAYN (talk) 18:22, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
- Then if it's all right with you, I'll just wait for one of them to go over it. That way I can look over the best version of the article. Note that I have alot of stuff on my watchlist, so please feel free to post a note on my talk page if I don't realize the copyedit has happened. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 18:34, 23 January 2011 (UTC)