Talk:North Star (Star Trek: Enterprise)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 01:06, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Confusing: " they overthrew the aliens and their descendants now treat them as second class citizens."

Modified that, I see what you mean, sounds like the alien descendents treat the humans as second class citizens. Miyagawa (talk) 12:30, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The lead and plot don't make it clear: The humans were abducted from Earth, right? And they were abducted in 1860 or so?

Made a small change to the lead and plot to specify both of those points. Miyagawa (talk) 12:30, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't add one as each of the actors were included in the second paragraph of the production section. The infobox used to have four or five more, but those were mostly stunt actors and I couldn't find a citation for them to say they were in this episode specifically (so I removed them). Miyagawa (talk) 12:30, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Vague sentence: " executive producer Rick Berman set him the challenge of writing a "parallel Earth" story similar to those featured in TOS but would fit with Enterprise." -- First, what is a "parallel Earth" story, what kinds of this story appeared in TOS and how would they "fit" differently in this series versus that one?
" Gene Roddenberry's original pitch to NBC for Star Trek was a "wagon train to the stars"." -- Was the western theme a homage to this detail? I'm having a hard time figuring out why this detail is where it is.

I'll cover the above two points together - I'll dig up the original Star Trek pitch by Roddenberry to NBC which explains this along with the "parallel Earth" thing - Roddenberry had an idea at the time which was expressed in some detail in the original pitch which involved humans from other eras living on other planets. I can't even remember if he even explained a mechanic in order to facilitate this. But for example, with The Original Series, you had the episode where there was a planet full of Romans, then one with Nazis, and Cowboys etc. Wasn't really done after that series, and to be honest, Stargate SG1 took the idea and ran off with it completely. Miyagawa (talk) 12:30, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, removed the wagon train reference and added a new one to explain the parallel Earth point from the original pitch. Miyagawa (talk) 19:00, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Once I've added the bit to explain the parallel Earth query above I'll run the checker again and fix this. Otherwise, I'm bound to only add more. Miyagawa (talk) 12:30, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links tool checks out. There are no disambiguation links.
I see no problems with article stability and neutrality. All images appear to be suitably licensed.

Placing the article on hold to wait for improvements. —Ed!^(talk) 01:22, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]