Talk:Oṣó/GA1
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 14:15, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
The infobox cites two genres of music with no source and nowhere else to be seen in the body article, "The music of Oṣó has elements of mysticism and sheds light on Brymo's folk and traditional roots" → this is the closest it gets and according to the article is only two songs. We avoid links on the lead, pretty sure they all can be added to the body of the article such as the critical acclaim and year-end-best lists. On top of that, the lead needs a little expansion it should contain a relevant portion of each topic and a mention of "Background and composition" is nowhere to be seen.
Regarding the Background and composition section: "Oṣó was produced by Brymo's frequent collaborator MikkyMe Joses. Brymo enlisted Chris Crerar to master the album at Metalwork Studios in Canada" → not on the given source; On the second portion of the text, perhaps divided into two paragraphs. On the singles first paragraph "When the video was released, it received mixed reviews." → "The video received mixed reviews." (more than one, but you only have one, which doesn't support the claim). It comes back and forth between the critic of the music and video. First, address the "music" and then the video (or the other way around), with critics/lists and so on. Nevertheless, the second paraph is much better. Use the second paraph as a model.
The Critical reception section is awful, makes it difficult for the casual user to read it, two/three paragraphs would make this way better to read. Moreover, the boxscore doesn't have sources next to them and you can say that X reviewer gave 4 stars out of five to the album..."Needs to be re-written the whole section. Lacks a source on the track listing to confirm it and its credits. So the release history is lacking sources and why mentioning the platform? Was it exclusive for iTunes? The article says nothing about it and if so should be mention on the body of the above and we usually use bracks here to say such.
Most of the References are fine, but there are a couple of "SHOUTS" (references: 1, 10, 20 and 22) as well as the access date of reference 10 is in a different format. Some publishers are missing and work is nowhere to be seen. The latter is mandatory on GA's while the publisher is optional. On top of that, I'm not sure regarding the reliability of some websites such as tooexclusive. A couple of dead links too. Is the external link still correct? You don't mention what the website is on the body of the article "website titled theosoproject.com dedicated to the project", the source says "also shared link to a channel through which his fans can get updates about his music and his forthcoming book." Currently, the website is selling furniture and beds?
Not only the flaws are all over the place, but the article is also far from meeting the good criteria as it doesn't comply with the manual of style guidelines, it is not well written and I have some doubts regarding the verifiable criteria. It needs to be seriously "polished", I would suggest addressing my comments, as well as take a look at the criteria once more. Failing this GA nomination. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:48, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I have addressed all of the issues you brought up here. I included a citation for the two genres in the infobox, and removed all of the references that were in the lead. I added sources to support the mastering of the album in Canada. I also cleaned up the singles section; it no longer goes back and forth. I shortened and broke down the critical reception section into two paragraphs. I also added sources to the boxscore. Moreover, I added a reliable source to confirm the tracklisting and release history. I fixed the reference issues and fixed ref 10's date format. TooXclusive is a notable website that publishes music reviews. They've been around for quite some time now. As for the dead links, I included a dead link template. I couldn't find archive urls in wayback machine. I personally believed the article is well written but if you insist, I can request for a member of WP:GUILD to look at it. Versace1608 Wanna Talk? 03:22, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
- Versace1608 To begin with, it looks much better now. I only took a quick glance at it, but on the t release history is better if you include an iTunes or other retailer references due to the label and format. Try too look up those dead archives on archive.is and webcitation.org. On the references you have "WATCH", "REVIEW" and "OSÓ", no caps. The release date for the first single is also missing. It wouldn't be a bad idea submitting it to a GOCE. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:08, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I looked at several GA articles about albums and I do not see iTunes listed as the norm in the release history section. I tweaked the release history section so there's no need to include iTunes. The album was not release exclusively on iTunes. I removed the dead links altogether since I couldn't recover those links. I removed those words that were in caps from the references. I don't know exactly what you meant by "the release date for the first single is also missing". I think you meant to say the source is missing. I added a source to support the release date of the first single. I put in a copy edit request at WP:GOCER. I have done all that you requested. Versace1608 Wanna Talk? 22:51, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
- Versace1608 To begin with, it looks much better now. I only took a quick glance at it, but on the t release history is better if you include an iTunes or other retailer references due to the label and format. Try too look up those dead archives on archive.is and webcitation.org. On the references you have "WATCH", "REVIEW" and "OSÓ", no caps. The release date for the first single is also missing. It wouldn't be a bad idea submitting it to a GOCE. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:08, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Versace1608: iTunes was an example, you could have used any other source, doesn't have to be exclusive as iTunes is not in every country. A source is needed for the release date, so according to the source, the album was only released in Nigeria, right? Yes, that's what I meant. Once the GOCE its completed, nominate it again for GA and let me know, I might or might not have the time by then to review it. Nevertheless, I will let you know. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:01, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I corrected the release history section and included an iTunes reference to support the release date. It was released worldwide, not just in Nigeria. I am going to renominate it once GOCE looks at it. I will notify you when that happens. Thanks for taking the time to review the article and pointing out the errors. Versace1608 Wanna Talk? 22:48, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I am notifying you because GOCE has been completed. I renominated it for GA. Can you kindly review it if you get the chance. Thanks. Versace1608 Wanna Talk? 22:02, 3 October 2019 (UTC)
- Just a note that any new review should be conducted on a different review page from this one. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:08, 4 October 2019 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I am notifying you because GOCE has been completed. I renominated it for GA. Can you kindly review it if you get the chance. Thanks. Versace1608 Wanna Talk? 22:02, 3 October 2019 (UTC)
- @MarioSoulTruthFan: I corrected the release history section and included an iTunes reference to support the release date. It was released worldwide, not just in Nigeria. I am going to renominate it once GOCE looks at it. I will notify you when that happens. Thanks for taking the time to review the article and pointing out the errors. Versace1608 Wanna Talk? 22:48, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Versace1608: Not sure if I will able to do so for now. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:37, 4 October 2019 (UTC)