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This is my favourite kind of article to review: the short kind. Let's get right to it.

Update: This is now a good article. Congratulations. Steve Smith (talk) 00:45, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it well written?

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Generally good. Some quibbles:

  • "In 1964 Stephenson himself achieved national fame..." Sort of a peculiar wording. The implication seems to be that somebody or something else achieved national fame before, which Stephenson then matched in 1964. Can you explain? Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) Green tickY revised Jezhotwells (talk) 09:16, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...resulting in him being tried on a charge of failing to leave a licensed premises..." How about just "resulting in charges for failing..."? Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) No - the point is that he was tried and the case achieved national prominence. Jezhotwells (talk) 09:16, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He is a Freeman of the City of Bristol and an OBE." I'm not familiar with the meaning of "Freeman" here. Could it be wikilinked? As well, I'm not familiar with the OBE, but it strikes me as more likely that one is admitted to an order than that one becomes an order. Can you confirm that the current wording is correct? Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) revised Green tickY Jezhotwells (talk) 09:16, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

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Well-cited, and all sources appear to clear WP:RS. Pass. Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it broad in its coverage?

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A few, generally minor, concerns here:

Nothing that I can source - yes he is married and has at least one daughter but I can find no RS for this. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:01, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • We're told the union passed a resolution against hiring non-whites, but we're not told how this translated into a ban by the company itself. Surely the union doesn't have authority over the company's hiring practices? Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) It apparently did in 1963 in Bristol, I have expanded the section a little. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:01, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Some of the timelines are confusing: the "early life" section seems to deal with his life up to 1962, and as far as I can tell the bus boycott began in 1961; I suspect that's not right, since Stephenson doesn't seem to have been in Bristol until 1962, when we are told that he went to work for Bristol City Council. Next we hear of him, he's the city's first black youth officer. Is this the capacity in which he went to work for the BCC? If so, that fact should probably stated in the same place as the fact that he went to work for the BCC. Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) Minor revisions cover this. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:01, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I infer that the public house incident was racially-motivated, though there's nothing in the article to that effect. Is my inference correct? Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) Your inference is coprrect, but none of the sources spell it out that clearly. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:01, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • We're told that he founded the Bristol Black Archives Partnership, and we're told that that was a major factor in his receiving the freedom of Bristol, but we're not actually told what that is. Is there information on that available? Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC) OK, expannded and cited. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:01, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it neutral?

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I'd say so. It's slightly laudatory, but that's probably par for the course for articles about decorated civil rights activists. Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it stable?

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Yes. Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

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I'm going to call this one "not applicable". It obviously lacks images, which is a shame, but I see no reason to believe that there are any free ones available, and I find it hard to conceive of any non-free ones that might clear WP:NFCC. Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This should be a good article with a minimum of work, but I'm placing it on hold for now. Steve Smith (talk) 07:23, 16 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Response

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Thanks for the thorough review. I think all of those points have been addressed now. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:02, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed your points, I think. Jezhotwells (talk) 00:16, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]