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Very nice article. Only a few nitpicky comments:

  • Maybe give a date for the image used in the infobox.
  • "1979 – 1998" in the infobox shouldn't have spaces.
  • West Coast is a disambig page.
  • Perhaps use {{sic}} in the SNL quote?
  • He made roughly $50,000 per episode - specify currency; I'm assuming US$.
  • Brynn Hartman visited the Italian restaurant Buca di Beppo - LA is only mentioned in the next sentence; perhaps move it up to here so one doesn't assume he's in Belgium or New Zealand or even Italy itself.
  • He threatened to leave her if she started using drugs again - vague about the "before". Just give a brief explanation of her previous experience with drugs as it's not mentioned for the uninitiated reader.
  • Brynn drove to the home of her friend Ron Douglas and confessed to the murder, although he initially did not believe her - "although" means "even though", which doesn't really fit here. Just "though" would make more sense.
  • raising the Hartman's children - plural "Hartmans' ".
  • The total amount of Hartman's estate was estimated at $1.23 million - the "total value"? And, again, specify currency.

All of these are fairly pedantic and minor, so I trust that you'll take care of these (it shouldn't take long) and I'll promote the article. Well done :) —97198 (talk) 12:19, 14 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'll clear these details up, thanks very much for the review! Gran2 17:42, 14 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]