Talk:R.I.P. (Rita Ora song)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:37, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
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This is a childhood favourite of mine, so I take pride in reviewing it! --K. Peake 08:37, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]Pipe Stargate to Stargate (record producers) under producers in the infoboxMove the release stuff to a separate sentence directly after the writing and production oneRemove wikilink on studio album- I'm not sure about Chase & Status and Stargate being linked before their production mentions in prose since that is different from separate infobox parameters, also pipe to Stargate (record producers) instead
- Removed the links, are you fine with that? Iaof2017 (talk) 10:29, 11 October 2022 (UTC)
For the sampling part, cut down to only mention the duo by name with no wikilink and remove the release year of the single plus other introMention after the United Kingdom position that it was her second number-one on the UK Singles Chart with the wikilinkSplit the other countries into a separate sentence, also change this to mentioning it reached the top 50 in ones among others since top 100 is not notable for the lead of a song that was number one in certain regionsMention that the Bubbling Under Hot 100 is a Billboard chartAdd the name of the Denmark certification organization, also this needs to be mentioned in the body like anything in the leadRemove "for "R.I.P."" because the term accompanying implies the music video was for the songRemove the United Kingdom after East London since everyone knows where the city is"depicts Ora and Tempah" → "depicts Ora and Tinie Tempah" because this is not his real name"she performed the song at several occasions," → "she performed "R.I.P." on several occasions,""among other for the" → "including the award of"
Background and composition
[edit]Same concern as before about linking to Chase & Status and Stargate before they are mentioned, also pipe to Stargate (record producers)The source does not actually say that it was intended for Rihanna"was not written for Rihanna." → "wasn't written for Rihanna." per the source's wording- Try to add some background info, like what led to Tinie Tempah, Chase & Status or any other collaborators working on this
- Done. Iaof2017 (talk) 11:02, 11 October 2022 (UTC)
"Several remixes, including by" → "Several remixes, which were done by" because these are the only ones sourced"on 28 August." → "on 28 August 2012."""R.I.P." is a" → "Musically, "R.I.P." is a"
Reception
[edit]"garnered mixed to positive reception" → "was met with mixed to positive reviews""between Ora and Tempah" → "between Ora and Tinie Tempah""Rihanna-collaborating British softies."" → "Rihanna-collaborating British softies"." per MOS:QUOTE"wrote that "if she's" → "wrote, "If [Ora]'s""our own high tops." → "our own high tops."" to end the full sentence quoted"stating that "it's still a" → "stating, "It's still a""decryed the song's lyrics" → "decried the song's lyrics""in the country." → "in the United Kingdom.""and similarly received a platinum certification" → "and also received a platinum certification""also entered the chart in New Zealand and reached" → "also charted in New Zealand, reaching" and mention the chart by name specifically"In the United States," → "In the US," per MOS:USPipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)"and number 3 on" → "and number three on" per MOS:NUMI think the awards would be better wrote out in prose instead straight after the reviews since four is not really enough for a table
Promotion
[edit]Retitle to Music video and promotion, as the first para is quite large- Img looks good!
Remove United Kingdom after East London because everyone knows where the city is"The video begins with" → "It begins with""through a moderate-lighted surrounding," → "through a moderately-lit surrounding," to be less tedious with the following prose"Tempah is standing next" → "Tinie Tempah is standing next""agains a dark grey setting." → "against a dark grey setting.""beanie collection," further" → "beanie collection", further" per MOS:QUOTE"and Tempah's appearance, writing that "not much goes on in the video" → "and Tinie Tempah's appearance in the video, writing that "not much goes on [...]""looking exceptionally hot,"" → "looking exceptionally hot",""watch them be hot."" → "watch them be hot"."Idolator should not be italicised"cribbing song itself."" → "cribbing song itself".""for American rapper" → "for Canadian musician" per his correct identity"on Late Show with David Letterman" → "on the Late Show with David Letterman"Pipe acoustic to Acoustic musicRemove wikilink on MTV
Track listing
[edit]- Good
Credits and personnel
[edit]Don't you have the necessary details to create this section?
Charts
[edit]Weekly charts
[edit]Wikilink Euro Digital Song Sales to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
Year-end charts
[edit]- Good
Certifications
[edit]- Good
Release history
[edit]- Good
See also
[edit]- Good
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks great at 25.4%!!!
Wikilink MTV on ref 13 instead of ref 51Official Charts → Official Charts Company on refs 19 and 58WP:OVERLINK of NME on ref 17Pipe Capital to Capital (radio network) on ref 40 instead on ref 48Cite Idolator as publisher instead on ref 43Cite Life and Times as work/website instead and pipe to Life + Times on ref 45 per MOS:LINK2SECTFix misspelling of year in ref 59's title
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold until all of the issues are fixed; that went smoothly! --K. Peake 10:24, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
- Heyy @Kyle Peake:. Massive thanks to you for picking up this review. I believe I addressed all of your concerns. Iaof2017 (talk) 11:07, 11 October 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, I like how you have left comments for specific issues and I did some copy editing to help out in a few areas too! --K. Peake 11:27, 11 October 2022 (UTC)