Talk:Richard Ravitch/GA1

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Not a bad article, but putting it on hold pending a couple of things:

The lead doesn't adequate summarise the article - it's almost entirely about the Lieutenant-Governor dispute, and overlooks his previous career
The article really needs a more logical breakdown than by decade; as it is it looks very segmented
I think the section on his appointment as Lieutenant-Governor could be expanded further - for something that's received massive amounts of press, one paragraph is a bit light. Rebecca (talk) 11:14, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It's taken long enough, but I think I've largely addressed these comments. Response and further action items (if any) welcome. Thanks! Frank | talk 00:59, 26 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

If no reply from Rebecca in the next couple days, I'll take over the review, since right now it's just sitting here. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:02, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Go ahead - I'm extremely busy right now. Sorry for the delay. Rebecca (talk) 19:37, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Here's some further comments:

The lead could be beefed up a little bit I think. Might just be opinion though.
"His family had begun building in Manhattan in the late nineteenth century," You just jump into this. Start with a sentence beforehand saying that the father/parents/whoever worked in construction or whatever word fits best.
Anything on a high school he attended? If not no big deal.
"He served in the army for a short time after graduation." Any more information on that? When did he join/leave and why? Also, after graduation from college or law school?
"His focus was low- and middle-income housing projects, and some notable developments he was responsible for were Waterside Plaza, Riverbend, and Manhattan Plaza, all in Manhattan. Some of the projects he worked on were built under the Mitchell-Lama Housing Program. He also built the first integrated housing projects in Washington, D.C., with James H. Scheuer." All this should be cited.
"After receiving death threats and having armed intrusions at his office, Ravitch began wearing a bulletproof vest at some public events, and security was provided for his family." Was this due to the transit strike fallout? It's a very interesting fact, but I'm curious as to why he had to.
Anything major that he did in his Millenial Housing Commission role?
Anything he did between 04-08?
'On August 20, the Appellate Division's Second Dept. ruled unanimously that "the Governor’s purported appointment of Mr. Ravitch...' No second quote mark, so I don't know where it ends.

The article's not too bad, but I feel it needs more beef in it. Given all the controversy I'm sure there's biographical info floating around out there. Answer what you can and I'll look over the article again. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:22, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

If the work is not done in 48 hours I'll fail it, which I'd rather not to. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:59, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It's been over the week and the editor, who is active, hasn't made any changes, so unfortunately I have to fail then. When all the changes are fixed up it can always be re-nominated. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 14:47, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fair enough...I actually missed these notes. Thanks for keeping up. Any chance of a re-look now? Frank | talk 15:00, 12 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take another look. Granted, usually after I review something I prefer that someone else does, as more eyes are always better than fewer. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:27, 12 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]