Talk:Romina Pérez/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 20:38, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will do the review. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 20:38, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It looks mostly ready in terms of meeting GA criteria. Specific postivies:

Good, appropriate image.
Plagiarization/close paraphrasing should not be an issue, as all of the sources are in Spanish.
I did some spot checks and the information appears accurate.
Very stable.
Fairly broad coverage.

Some things I noticed:

Rather unorthodox use of the word pertains in both the lead and body.
'Pertain' can be used to mean 'belong to something'; in this case, a generation. However, perhaps it doesn't have as much English colloquial use as its Spanish counter part, pertenece. Any suggestions for a different word? Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:08, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

In this context, the simpler phrase "comes from" feels a little more natural. It's entirely up to you.

Done Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:12, 17 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The lead seems underlinked.
There admittedly isn't much to link. I opted not to link country names like Bolivia, Iran, or European Union per MOS:OVERLINK. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:07, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Most good/featured articles tend to have a lot of links in the lead, for instance, Winston Churchill. Again, it's minor enough that I'm not going to force you.

Admittedly, this biography would benefit from adjoining articles, such as ones for the NGOs she worked at or a list of ambassadors to Iran. I'd consider adding them as valid red links, but I typically avoid that unless there is at least an equivalent article on a different language wiki. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:12, 17 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There are quite a few run-on sentences that could be broken down to make the article easier to read. For instance, "Returning to Bolivia, she worked alongside the country's mineworkers—one of the Communist Party's primary sectoral bases of support—whose history, political agitations, and class struggles Pérez compiled, donating the finished audio literary works to the archives of the Syndical Federation of Bolivian Mineworkers."
That's a trouble I seem to arrive at often. I've split the above sentence into two. Feel free to tell me if it should be further shortened or direct me to other over-long sentences. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:07, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

That looks good enough. That was the only especially noticeable one. You should be good.

There is no section on her public image, political views, or personal life. At least one or two, if you can find the information, would be helpful.
Unlike in the US or UK, in Bolivia, with few exceptions, parliamentarians tend to keep low public profiles. Their political positions are largely understated, as most—ruling party and opposition alike—operate as "hand raisers" for executive projects. All this to say, there is scant information about Pérez's image or views beyond what is already stated in the article. A cursory look through the archives of Página Siete, for example, find forty total mentions of Pérez's name over the course of seven years, all already included or otherwise non-notable. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:07, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'd feared that might be the case. No need to worry, then.

Good luck. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 21:25, 15 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, it looks very good. I made a couple small suggestions which you may or may not wish to address. Otherwise, I'll have it finished shortly. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 02:59, 17 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

All done. Sorry for taking a while to finish it. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 00:37, 19 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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