Talk:Severn bore/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:15, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"on the tidal reaches of the River Severn in England" - I think it would be good to mention "southern England"
The lead is perfect
"exceeded only by the Bay of Fundy" - you should mention that the Bay of Fundy is in Canada (and USA?)
"at about 700 mph" convert to kmh too
"decreases to about 200 mph" - same here
"a segment of the wave has to accommodates to the ever-decreasing width" - no plural needed
" and its height is nearly fifty feet" - this should be read out as 50 feet (15 m)
" with the largest bores occurring between 9 and 11" - 9 and 11 pm or am?
"about two feet of fresh water below Gloucester" - 2 feet (0.61 m)
" because the wave is travelling faster than the wave speed in water above the Bore (see tidal bore for more details)" - why is bore capitalised here?
"One of the main viewpoints is at Minsterworth at the Severn Bore Inn on the A48" - link A48 road
"The river was first surfed in 1955 by WWII veteran Jack Churchill" - World War II
The fourth and third paragraphs in the Transport and surfing section should be switched around and merged, so that they're in chronological order
Ref 8 is dead

Very decent all around, well written and sourced. Naturally I didn't check the ones I can't access. On hold. JAGUAR 14:53, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking on this review. I have dealt with all the things you mention above. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:37, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. I'm sure Fram will be thrilled! ;-D

JAGUAR 18:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]