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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 16:21, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
    Should "king" be capitalicized? Sounds like a proper noun to me.
    Standardized to non-capitalized version. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    "ending the last Russo-Polish War.[1]" - not sure if I understand correctly, but there were many more Russia-Polish wars. Maybe remove "last" to avoid this confusion or replace with "latest"
    Good point, fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    "comprised part of Shein's army.[4]" - I would add "a" behind "comprised" for flow
    Good point, fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    "force of about 1,500 strong" - not sure if the "strong" is correct; is this standard in war-related articles?
    I am not sure myself, I thought I saw it used in some other articles; if you would like to change it, go ahead. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    delink "pospolite ruszenie" in the second mention
    "Cossack" should be linked here and the one in the second paragraph of the second section should be delinked
    Done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Can you integrate "Shein's begun the siege of Smolensk on 28 October.[6]" into the next section?
    Done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Should "siege" be capitalicized?
    I think it can, some articles do it for the Battle of, and it is the same with Siege of. But I just checked and I don't see much capitalization of this word in the article? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Why the bracket "Tymosz (Timofiy) Orendarenko"?
    Changed to Ukrainian spelling. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    This and the other sections are ok
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    Non-English sources should be labelled as such
    Done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Wrong formatting of Ref 7
    ISBN error fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Several sources should be labelled as "pp" instead of "p"
    Fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall: Great article, just needs a few fixes before passing. --GoPTCN 16:52, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Pass/Fail:
    Thanks, I addressed the raised issues. Is there anything I missed? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Thanks for the corrections. I just ignore this "strong" for now :) Overall very interesting, good work! :)--GoPTCN 18:31, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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