Talk:Six Feet Under (Billie Eilish song)/GA1
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Reviewer: LOVI33 (talk · contribs) 14:28, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
DarklyShadows I'm happy to see that you've unblocked yourself. I'll start my review soon. LOVI33 14:28, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
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Infobox and lead
[edit]- Cover art needs alt text.
- "Finneas O'Connell wrote and solely" → "Finneas O'Connell, Eilish's brother, solely wrote and"
- Maybe add something about it's lyrical content after the pop ballad mention.
- "it was certified platinum in Canada by Music Canada (MC)" → "Commercially, it was certified platinum by Music Canada (MC)"
Background and composition
[edit]- "on Soundcloud" → "through Eilish's SoundCloud"
- "Eilish's second ever single." → "her second single."
- "According to sheet music website Musicnotes.com" → "According sheet music published by Hal Leonard Music Publishing on Musicnotes.com" with target
- Target A3 to A (musical note)
- Target D5 to D (musical note)
- "The song has been" → "The song is"
- "and delicate as" → "and delicate like"
- "Lyrics include: "Help, I lost myself again/But I remember you/Don’t come back; it won’t end well/But I wish you’d tell me too."[7]" this sentence seems redundant as you are not analyzing the lyrics. Remove it.
Reception
[edit]- "When it was released" → "Upon it's release"
- ""Six Feet Under" has been awarded" → "The song has been awarded"
- Remove Music Canada from the last sentence, already mentioned in previous sentence
Promotion
[edit]- "The music video was directed by Eilish. The video shows" → "It was directed by Eilish and shows"
- [14][2] refs need to be in numerical order
- ""Six Feet Under" was used in" → "The song was used in"
Track Listing
[edit]- Change title to "Track listing"
- "Remix EP" → "Digital EP – Remixes" with target
- Add total length for Remix EP
Personnel
[edit]- Target Tidal to Tidal (service)
Certifications
[edit]- MOS:TABLECAPTION, probably: Certifications and sales for "Six Feet Under"
References
[edit]- Make sure all these are archived using the tool
- Copyvio score looks good at 20.6%
- I think you misspelled the authors name in ref 5
- Target YouTube to itself in ref 14
- Target NME to itself in ref 15
- Remove target to iTunes in ref 17
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold until issues are fixed. It was great reviewing one of your articles again. I hope to do another soon! LOVI33 19:41, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
LOVI33 All the problems should be addressed! The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:51, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
- Great, I'll pass it now! LOVI33 22:47, 13 July 2020 (UTC)