Talk:Smith Gun/GA1

GA Review

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Lede

"ad hoc" - either link to ad hoc, or replace with makeshift, I'd say. We're writing for the lowest common denominator here.
"With a German invasion of Great Britain seeming likely after the defeat in the Battle of France most available weaponry was diverted to the regular British Army" - comma after "Battle of France" please.
"The Smith Gun was designed by a retired Army Major named William H. Smith and was put into production in 1941 following a demonstration to the Prime Minister, Winston Churchill." - perhaps include designed as a makeshift device/stopgap/something for the Home Guard to link it to the previous sentence?

Development

"Given these shortcomings, those modern weapons that were available were allocated to the British Army," - same as with Sticky Bomb, "those remaining anti-tank weapons"?
'unorthodox' needs to be in full quotation marks and referenced with an inline cite, please.
"The weapon design was submitted to the Ordnance Board, who were unconvinced with its merits" - of, not with. Or better "were not convinced of its merits".

Design

"3 inch calibre smoothbore barrel,[2] 54 inches in length,[6]" - reads awkwardly with that extra comma. Suggest "3 inch calibre smoothbore barrel 54 inches in length,[2][6]"
"both anti-personnel or anti-tank rounds" - either "both anti-personnel and anti-tank rounds" or "either anti-personnel or anti-tank rounds".
"The weapon was found to have several flaws in its design, and as such was not well-liked by some of the Home Guard units that it was issued to." - inline cite please

Operational history

"Production on the Smith Guns began in late 1941, but problems with their production" - awkward. Possibly "the Smith Guns began to be manufactured in late 1941, but production problems.." although that isn't much better.
"Production problems also affected the ammunition for the weapons; a delay in producing anti-tank ammunition meant that each weapon was only supplied with six or seven rounds." - awkward, repetition - suggest just "Production problems also affected the ammunition for the weapons; a delay in manufacturing anti-tank ammunition meant that each weapon was only supplied with six or seven rounds.
"simple, powerful and accurate weapon which, if properly handled, will add greatly to the firepower of the Home Guard." - inline cite.

That's all. Ironholds (talk) 02:52, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. That should all be done now; the only problem I had was with the first Development section point; the text in this article is the same as at Sticky bomb, but I've rewritten it slightly, so hopefully it makes sense now. Skinny87 (talk) 16:41, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]