Talk:Snakefly/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 02:59, 24 December 2019 (UTC)

Hi, happy to take this! Also it's been long since I worked with you two, Chiswick and Cwmhiraeth :D Sainsf (talk · contribs) 02:59, 24 December 2019 (UTC)

Thanks to the previous reviewer for diligently checking almost everything in the article except the prose quality, which is what my review will primarily focus on. Dablinks, copyvio, deadlinks - no issue detected. So here are my comments:

• In the lead,

• There is a line with an inline citation.. is the fact not covered elsewhere in the main text? Why add a ref in the lead?
• Maybe wikilink thorax, ovipositor, larvae and pupae? I am not sure which of these would be too common in the context of this article, so I leave it to you.
• ...used to deposit eggs under bark or in some other concealed location and In most species, the larvae develop under the bark of trees - maybe "trees" is redundant, as it is excluded in the first mention? If you make changes here note the part in Ecology too.

• Description:

• by having an elongate prothorax elongated?
• not the modified forelegs of the Mantispidae Maybe "mantis-flies" would be more reader-friendly? They won't have to look up the wikilink for clarification on what fly we are referring to
• Maybe wikilink sclerotinised to sclerotin? Similarly costal
• "elongated" is being used a bit too frequently... probably look for alternatives? Not a must though
• that is present in Raphidiids Should it not be "raphidiids", just like you use lower case for inocelliids earlier?
• Some of the short sentences can be combined into a few long ones, just my suggestion to improve the prose.

• Distribution and habitat:

• "rich in species" is probably more reader-friendly than "speciose"

• Life cycle:

• "instar" is linked twice
• In rhaphidioptiids, mating takes place in a "dragging position", while in inoceliidads, the male adopts a tandem position under the female I am confused, what are rhaphidioptiids and inoceliidads? Different from raphidiids and inocelliids?
• Convert template needed for 0 deg C

• Ecology

• Maybe wikilink territorial
• raphidiidal species won't simply "raphidiid" work?
• I feel the small predators and parasites section should really be included in this section.

• Predators and parasites

• Maybe wikilink "generalist"

• Evolution

• "relict" is a duplicate link
• Use "mya" consistently
• Engel 2002 with updates according to Bechly and Wolf-Schwenninger, 2011 and Ricardo Pérez-de la Fuente et al (2012) Use commas, brackets or both consistently while mentioning these references. If possible you may add a few words introducing the authors.

The rest looks fine to me. A really well-written, interesting article. Cheers! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:07, 24 December 2019 (UTC)

• One more thing I noticed though, in the sources. I am not confident about the private "Mikko's Phylogeny Archive" source, especially with its homepage stating "Please, don't use this page as a scientific reference. This site is not peer-reviewed, and any alleged information contained herein may in fact represent whim, caprice, bias, speculation, ignorance, or simply typographical error, rather than science." Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:12, 24 December 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for taking this on Sainsf. Chiswick Chap is away for a few days, so I will try to deal with your comments myself. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:40, 24 December 2019 (UTC)

I think I have dealt with all these points (apart from the Engel 2002 one), and I have replaced "Mikko's Phylogeny Archive" with better sources. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 21:02, 24 December 2019 (UTC)

Nice work :) I am happy to pass this article now. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:00, 25 December 2019 (UTC)