Talk:Stained glass in Liverpool Cathedral/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 12:49, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

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• "and it is intended that they should form an integrated scheme throughout the cathedral." - perhaps "with the intention of forming an integrated scheme throughout the cathedral" would read better for tense purposes.

• Agree.

• "They include scenes and characters from the Old and New Testaments, evangelists, church fathers, saints, and laymen, some famous, others more humble" -a little vague, can you at least mention a few examples perhaps of figures depicted?

• So many, it's impossible to choose. They are in the body of the article, and to include them here would be IMO unnecessary repetition.

History

• "the main lines on which the design of the window should be based and the extent to which is to be of clear glass or coloured" -perhaps attribute that quote.

• Ref expanded. Does this work?

Description

• "The designs were by J. W. Brown. " -here you might elaborate a little on his past work experience, nothing much, but just to improve flow and comprehension.

• The added expansion should deal with this.

• "the Woodward family, who were corn merchants between 1803 and 1915, " -were they based in Liverpool? If so perhaps add "local" before corn.

• Done.

• "The window" -tweak to "The east window" (even if in the title)

• Done.

• " J. S. Bach musician, Isaac Newton scientist, and Thomas Linacre physician" -should there be a "the" before professions here or the profession placed before the name?

• Professions placed first.

• " Each window shows the author of the gospel at the top with his symbol, and below are figures linked with the subject matter of the gospel. And each window" Not keen on the sentence beginning with "And" here, can you reword to avoid this? Perhaps ". Each window, known by its predominant colour, shows the author of the gospel at the top with his symbol. Below are figures linked with the subject matter of the gospel."

• Agree, Done.

• What is meant by " Journeys taken in faith"?

• Section expanded, with descriptions of the images in both rose windows included.

• " The Musicians' Window contains composers, performers, and conductors who have played a part in the development of Anglican church music. " -any examples?

• Wish I could add examples, but none given in this source, and I cannot find any elsewhere.

• Attribute "all creation united in peace"

• Section expanded. Does this work?

Is there nothing which can be said from a technical viewpoint, with an analysis of the artwork in the designs or an analysis of common themes, that sort of thing? I would have expected a section examining it from an artistic/creative aspect aside from the description.

• I should like to include an Appraisal section but can find nothing appropriate in the sources I have, or in an online search. My main source comes from a former member of the cathedral, so I have tried to make the article as neutral as possible.

♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:00, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

• Many thanks for a prompt review. Are my amendments adequate? --Peter I. Vardy (talk) 17:53, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Yes, looks fine I think.♦ Dr. Blofeld 15:16, 10 December 2014 (UTC)