Talk:Sunkern

GA failed[edit]

1. Well written? Fail (Though well referenced) O. K

2. Factually accurate? O.K. (Though well referenced)

3. Broad in coverage? O. K.

4. Neutral point of view? Pass

5. Article stability? Pass

6. Images? Pass

Additional comments :

Verb tense ~~is not consistent~~ could be improved.
Examples :

Sunkern are available in Pokémon Gold, Silver and Crystal, both in Route 24, and the National Park. It is also available in Pokémon Emerald, in the Safari Zone,[7] once the player has defeated the Elite Four.

Needs a throughout copyedit as it now reads like a manual more than an encyclopedic article. (e.g. A Sunkern featured in Episode 189, "Moving Picture", inwhich the group, including Todd, visit a fertile mountain, which has been frozen because of an Articuno, the Pokémon Todd is attempting to photograph. )
~~A sentence like Sunkern's statistics are abysmally low, the lowest in the game. is a bit POV with such a word as abysmal.~~
The group came across an abandoned Sunkern, and gave it to a visiting old couple in the area. In return for aiding it, the Pokémon evolved with the help of the Sun Stone Ash won at the Bug Catching Contest, allowing the couple to take their picture with a Sunflora, as they did the day they married. doesn't make any sense ... if they gave the Pokémon away how can he use the Sun Stone on the Pokémon.
~~An appearance/characteristics section would be a nice addition. Maybe a biology section too.~~
There are seventeen different Pokémon types, a special attribute determining strengths and weaknesses of each species, offsetting each other in a complicated series of rock-paper-scissors relationships. is too general to fit on such a specific article. Just a wikilink to a more general-subject article would do the job instead of the sentence.
The Pokémon anime series and films are a meta-series of adventures separate from the canon that most of the Pokémon video games follow (with the exception of Pokémon Yellow, a game based on the anime storyline). too is too general to be part of such an article.

This article needs a bit of reworking ... if you are interested to have more insight into what you should change, please request more assistance or a deeper review on my talk page. Lincher 18:14, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I have striked the commented/repaired comments but it still hasn't answer the copyediting I requested which was somewhat the reason I decided not to give it a on hold but rather a failing. If ask someone to help you with this it could be done in a jiffy. I might help too. Good luck. Lincher 19:29, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Added comments, things to change and giving more insight into my earlier comments. Lincher 19:40, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Seeking another review[edit]

I did some copyediting to improve some of the run-ons in the article. I'm reviewing the fail Lincher gave. Shin'ou's TTV (Futaba|Masago|Kotobuki) 18:49, 1 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

GA passed[edit]

Even if the wording would need to be copyedited a bit more for some sentences are ambiguous for non-Pokémon related readers, it still is better than the first version sent to GA and is much nicer to read too. Nice work. Lincher 11:38, 3 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Since this is no longer an article period...[edit]

I've removed the GA template altogether, since of course, DelistedGA would apply to an article that has been delisted, but obviously, a redirect is not an article. Homestarmy 22:54, 13 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]