Talk:Takin' My Time/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 16:41, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This article is not too large but should be fine to become a GA; I will start reviewing soon to verify --K. Peake 16:41, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Target Warner Bros. to Warner Records
Target John Hall to John Hall (New York politician)
"released in 1973 by Warner Bros. Records." → "It was released in 1973 by Warner Bros. Records." as a new sentence, with the appropriate target
"Takin' My Time is an amalgamation" → "The album is an amalgamation"
"The ten tracks on the album are" → "The 10 tracks are" per MOS:NUM
Wikilink upbeat per MOS:LINK2SECT
"hired to produce the album, but was replaced" → "hired to handle the production, but was ultimately replaced"
"from critics, and reached number eight-seven on the" → "from music critics, while it reached number 87 on the US"
"has also been positive, as critics liked" → "have also been positive, with critics praising"
"believes Takin' My Time was Raitt's" → "believed the album was Raitt's"
"until her comeback" → "up to her comeback" to avoid repetitive wording
Mention the accompanying tour in the last sentence of the lead, though just state "accompanying tour" without "for the album" since accompanying makes it obvious

Recording and composition

Retitle to Background and composition
"In 1973, Bonnie Raitt moved to" → "In 1973, Raitt moved to"
"of the band Little Feat." → "of American rock band Little Feat." with the target
"After the release of Dixie Chicken," → "After the release of their third studio album Dixie Chicken (1973),"
"and Raitt hired frontman" → "with Raitt hiring the frontman"
"Musician John Hall was then brought in" → "American musician John Hall was then brought in for production" with the target
"to July 1973, at Sunset Sound in" → "to July 1973 at Sunset Sound Recorders in" with the wikilink
[1] should solely be at the end of the para since it is the only ref of it
Are you sure there isn't any more background info to add?
"explores many different" → "combines many different"
"Takin' My Time is similar to Raitt's previous release," → "Takin' My Time is similar to Raitt's previous studio album"
Add release year of the album in brackets
Wikilink upbeat per MOS:LINK2SECT
"bluesy intimacy" according to" → "bluesy intimacy," according to"
"vary in genre." → "vary in genre;"
"a dance track inspired by" → "a dance track, inspired by" with the target
"All ten tracks on the album are" → "All 10 tracks on Takin' My Time are"

Release and reception

"in October 1973, by" → "in October 1973, through"
Target Warner Bros. Records to Warner Records
"reached number eigthy-seven on the" → "reached number 87 on the US"
"and number ninety-one on the" → "and number 91 on the US"
"with a nonstop touring schedule" → "with a continuous touring schedule"
Mention when the tour was
Wikilink Mark Bego
Any more promotion of the album other than what is currently here about the tour, maybe?
"received positive reviews from critics." → "was met with positive reviews from music critics." with the target
"Billboard described the album" → "The staff of Billboard described the album"
"and wrote: "it's" → "with him writing that "it's"
"Retrospective reviews have also" → "Retrospective reviews of Takin My Time from critics have also"
"and "Wah She Go Do."" → "and "Wah She Go Do"."
"toward some of the other folk-inspired tracks," → "towards some of the folk-inspired tracks,"
"and said:" → "with him saying:"
"the ten cover tracks," → "the album's 10 cover tracks,"
"Iyengar believes" → "Iyengar believed"

Track listing

You need to put "Credits adapted..." at the top with an appropriate ref to verify the credits here
Writers should be separated by using hlist
Are you sure there are no producers for the tracks known?
Target Ivy Hunter to Ivy Jo Hunter

Personnel

Target bottleneck guitar to Slide guitar
Remove wikilink on slide guitar
Target John Hall to John Hall (New York politician)

Production

This should be under a sub-heading instead of having a sub-section

Charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

Copyvio score looks smooth at 22.5%
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Cite AllMusic as publisher instead for ref 2
Authorlink Dave Marsh on ref 4 and wikilink Random House
The author of ref 6 does not seem to show up?
Target Ticknor & Fields to Ticknor and Fields on ref 7
Authorlink Gary Graff on ref 8
WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 13
WP:OVERLINK of Record World on ref 14

Book sources

This should be under a sub-heading instead of having sub-section
Authorlink Mark Bego

Final comments and verdict

On hold, even though this article is short, I did notice that you have some reasonably good writing skills! --K. Peake 08:42, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: Alright, I believe I have addressed your concerns, and thank you for the review!. Regarding the lack of information about...well everything related to this album, I don't think there is any more information out there. This isn't one of Raitt's bigger albums, and I think I've exhausted all the information I could find. Regarding the possibility of more promotional stuff, I don't think there is any more. Raitt was a touring machine back in the 1970s, and for the longest time that was the only way she was able to promote her music. She wouldn't even release a single until 7 years after she entered the music business. Famous Hobo (talk) 21:40, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Famous Hobo: There were a few changes you missed but they were only minor, so I did some brief copy editing and made the required fixes to ✓ Pass this! --K. Peake 05:32, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]