Talk:Tara Air/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Arsenikk ^(talk) 13:44, 4 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Avoid very short paragraphs, such as the first one, which is two very short sentences.
The second paragraph of the lead reads like an advertisement, using vague terms and weasel words instead of presenting hard facts.
The lead does not summarize the body. Instead, it supplements by providing information not provided otherplace. See WP:LEAD. In particular, the lead should have a summary of the destinations (what are the secondary hubs, how many destinations), a summary of the fleet.
The prose is poor; for instance, random words seem to be capitalized, and the use of an ampersand (&) instead of writing 'and' is completely unacceptable. Many sentences also have bad flow.
For instance "The airlines' activities encompass scheduled & charter STOL operations previously provided by Yeti Airlines Domestic; it's operations focus on serving remote and mountainous Airports & Airstrips." would be much better written: "The airline took over Yeti Arline's domestic scheduled and charter short take-off and landing (STOL) services to remote and mountainous areas." It is shorter, and much easier to read, yet says exactly the same thing.
The article needs a history section, even if the airline has been around for a short time, there will always be some history. For instance, look at Krohn Air for a very young airline which at least has some history to it. Why was the airline created? Did it start all routes at once?
A list of destinations is fine, and there are few enough that inclusion in the article is correct. However, a list of routes is not considered appropriate.
I do not understand this about the charter flights. If they are charter, why are they flow with announced rates? What makes them not scheduled?
Yeti Airlines is mentioned in the prose, so avoid linking it under 'see also'.
The majority of the references should be from other sources than the airline itself, for instance newspapers and aviation magazines.
References need to be formatted with titles, publisher/author, accessdates (if online) and dates of publishing. I recommend {{cite web}}, {{cite news}} and {{cite book}} for instance to get correct formatting.
File:Taraair.jpg certainly does (because of the star) meet the threshold for originality needed for copyright. It should therefor be deleted from the commons and uploaded to Wikipedia with a fair use rationale.

I am failing the article, as it does not meet the good article criteria. It needs a copyedit, information in the lead needs to also appear in the body, the lead must summarize the article better, and a history section must be made. Once the above points have been seen to, feel free to renominate at GAN. Arsenikk ^(talk) 13:44, 4 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Mostly Done Pol430 talk to me 12:22, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]