Talk:The Cherrytree Sessions/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HĐ (talk · contribs) 09:54, 14 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this :) — Simon (talk) 09:54, 14 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

So much sorry for the delay, comments to follow

The Cherrytree Sessions is considered one volume of a series of releases first envisaged by Cherrytree Records label head and producer Martin Kierszenbaum in order to promote his artists ---> I can't understand clearly what this sentence means, please clarify it
Gaga's performance for The Cherrytree Sessions was first released as a video posted to the label's website ---> I think "performances" would be better because Gaga performed a number of songs during the event, didn't she?
After discussing her international travels, Gaga performs an acoustic version of "Brown Eyes" at the piano where she performed for Kierszenbaum the first time they met ---> past tense applies here
The performance coincided... ---> Again please change "performance" into plural form
The EP itself consists of three tracks recorded live from the performance ---> "the show" or "the event" would be much better
the performance of "Just Dance"'s ---> reduce that "'s"
The Cherrytree Sessions debuted at 45 on the Mexican Albums Chart, on August 20, 2010 --> Reduce the comma

Hi Simon, I have corrected these. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 16:13, 14 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passing. Good work! — Simon (talk) 10:16, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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