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When "revising" plots don't make them incomprehensible

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Don't do stupid things like this:

"At the funeral Liu Qing talks to Ding, revealing her father's plan to have a fake funeral for him after killing Qiu so that he can now live in peace."

Who is Qiu? This is the first and only time Qiu is mentioned. It's the final sentence and the culmination of the plot so it seems pretty important but no one knows who Qiu is because there is no other reference to him. There's not even a list of players that says who Qiu is. If you're going to remove every other reference to Qiu you need to say who he is in the one remaining reference so it's comprehensible. Waerloeg (talk) 08:55, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Adding to this, I've just compared the versions in the history. In the second paragraph the monk disappears from the plot and then Ding is told to leave a school because a youth dies. Where's the monk? What youth? What school? How much time has passed? There's no mention at all of the monk returning several times or that the three years are up and Ding leaves the monastery and takes up residence in a sword school where he is attacked.

The vandal who "shortened" the plot did so by deleting huge chunks of the plot. The discrepancy just mentioned involves the cutting the last half of one paragraph and the first half of the next with no rewriting. The last paragraph of plot as I write this is the last sentence of the original last paragraph with the intervening three and a half paragraphs just deleted. The vandal just deleted the first 13 words of the first paragraph. There was no attempt to shorten the plot, just deletion without abbreviation. I am remedying the vandalism by restoring the plot. Waerloeg (talk) 09:13, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]