Talk:Tupelo Honey/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow(complain) 10:12, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
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B. MoS compliance:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
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B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
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The infobox has recording details, yet these are long-winded and somewhat confusing. Please rewrite these clearly and concisely.
- I've changed the recording dates to the style that's in Achtung Baby, an FA. Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Do not mention the B-sides of the singles in the infobox
  - Removed Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I have made some minor copy-editing changes in the 'Background' and 'Recording' sections to help the flow of prose
'Release' section: there is a lot of missing information here, such as record label, release dates and formats.
- Added record label and release date. Isn't it obvious that it was an LP? Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Mention it anyway, as cassette tapes came out around then Adabow(complain) 21:23, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Tupelo Honey reached number 27 on the Billboard charts", do you specifically mean the Billboard 200?
  - Changed Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
First paragraph of 'Aftermath' section seems a bit PoV, and may need rewording, using quotations, or additional references. Also second sentence should be reworded so that it doesn't start with 'but'.
- Agadant will have to look at that - I don't own the Hage book. Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Agadant seems not to be editing at the moment, so I've hiden the paragraph from view, so it can be fixed at a later date - I'll leave a message on Agadant's talk page. Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 14:50, 18 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I have replaced the level three headers in the 'Track listing' section with bold lines
'Personnel' section needs a source
- Added source for "Production". The musicians are referencd in the "Recording section". Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
In the 'Charts' section there are not several charts, so reorganise this information as prose, rather than tables.
- See The Freewheelin' Bob Dylan, an FA, which uses the same format. Kitchen Roll (Exchange words)
- ""(Straight to Your Heart) Like a Cannonball" was the third single from the album and only reached number 119 on the American charts." Again, specify which chart
  - This would be the Billboard Hot 100, but this makes no sense as it charted at #119, which is more than 100, so I'm not sure about this. Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 11:13, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - I thought it might be the Top Heatseekers chart, but that was only introduced in 1993 (apparently) Adabow(complain) 21:23, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      - I reworded it so it says it charted outside the Hot 100 at number 119, which makes more sense. Kitchen Roll (Exchange words) 14:50, 18 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There are some minor issues that need to be addressed. I will out the review on hold, and allow seven days for relevant changes to be made. Good luck improving the article! Adabow(complain) 10:12, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I guess everything is satisfied now - just make sure that the now-hidden paragraph is followed up on. Adabow(complain) 06:57, 19 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've restated it using a direct quotation. Agadant (talk) 14:30, 21 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]