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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:21, 11 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]


This is only the second time I have reviewed a naval ship out of all my reviews, so please forgive any newbie mistakes! I should have this complete soon. JAGUAR  17:21, 11 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:


Initial comments

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  • "named for the 14th state" - named after?
    • Sounds fine to me.
  • The lead summarises the article perfectly, so this meets the GA criteria
  • "As built, she was fitted with heavy military masts" - I would recommend wiki-linking this for reference. In contrast, lattice masts is linked in the same sentence
    • Linked - I had forgotten to do this one.
  • "She had a crew of 827 officers and men, though this increased to 881 and later to 896" - was this increased in World War I?
    • Conway's isn't clear, but I'd guess the standard crew actually decreased during WWI, since the 7-inch guns were removed, and space was needed for trainees. Just a hunch though.
  • "in Quincy, Massachusetts (MA)" - are the initials here needed? (Again, "Provincetown, (MA)")
    • I guess not.
  • Just curious, why is this article in d-m-y dates? Nothing wrong with it of course!
    • The US military switched to DMY in the 20th century, so we normally follow that in related articles.
  • The caption for the last image is messed up ("Vermont c. 1919&nsdash;20")

References

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On hold

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A short review, but this is a well written article and is very worthy of becoming GA. Those were the only prose issues I could find, so once they're clarified then this will have no problem passing! JAGUAR  22:10, 12 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them so fast! This looks good to go now JAGUAR  16:59, 13 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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