Talk:Union Pacific 4014/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 00:47, 17 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 03:53, 16 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Very good work for a first GA, Trains13. 7-day hold to tidy up some things. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:41, 16 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I've adjusted the info as you requested and I've also added one news article link about 4014 visiting the St. Paul Union Station. Trains13 (talk) 16:08, 16 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

Link Union Pacific in the first sentence.
The second lead paragraph suffers from proseline style; the sentences all start with "In (year)". More variety would be helpful. A couple of places in the body could use this.

History

Consider disbanding this level-2 header and promoting the four level-3 headers to level 2, as this is the only level-2 content header.
Several areas need GEOCOMMAs. e.g. ...between Ogden, Utah and Evanston, Wyoming with...
On February 6, 2019, No. 4014's boiler passed a hydrostatic test and the locomotive was successfully test fired on April 9. This needs a comma after the first "test" (User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences), and I'd also use "test-fired" (hyphenated).
No. 4014 subsequently made two tours on its own, the first through the Midwestern United States, including brief stops at Saint Paul Union Depot and the Lake Superior Railroad Museum, from July 8 to August 8; and the second through the Southwestern United States from September 27 to November 26. This shows as an unwieldy sentence if you strip away all those reference tags. Perhaps No. 4014 subsequently made two tours on its own. From July 8 to August 8, it visited the Midwestern United States, including brief stops at Saint Paul Union Depot and the Lake Superior Railroad Museum; it then toured the Southwestern United States from September 27 to November 26.

Sourcing and spot checks

Earwig turns up mostly organizational names and formulations like "RailGiants Train Museum in Pomona, California". No issues.

Nine references were chosen for spot checks. No issues were found.

2: A press release, used for some of the information in the infobox. This is basically ABOUTSELF.
3: Unsure what this is used for, maybe definitions? It's hard to discern because of the use case.
15: Trains story on locomotive renumbering for Big Boy to reassume 4014.
17: Trains story on UP looking to acquire a Big Boy for excursion service.
27: Wyoming Tribune Eagle story notes attention mostly diverted to 844. Also notes that cranes had to be brought in, which I guess verifies the claim in the article.
28: AP article. This should have "agency" set to "Associated Press" in the citation template but is fine otherwise.
39: No waiver needed to run 11,000 miles of steam, per Trains.
50: Donation of 3985 to RMHA. It's a press release, but it at least confirms the point.
66: Announcement of (canceled) steam tour. Again, ABOUTSELF.

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