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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 00:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]


I'll post a review for this shortly. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 00:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I've done a once over of the article, but there's a significant issue that prevents a more thorough review. Most of the prose here is made up of quotations, with very little original writing. This article is going to need some reworking so that most of it is written in your own words before the prose and sourcing are evaluated. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 01:42, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Thebiguglyalien: I took a crack at fixing these issue. Let me know if it's looking any better.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 14:03, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Gen. Quon It's looking good. I added a few more minor notes below. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 20:16, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good! I'll add the article to the list of GAs, and I'll add the album to my regular listening. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 21:27, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Well-written

A couple notes for the revised article:

Verifiable with no original research
  • Overall, this article is really quote-heavy. Unless the specific wording is what's being discussed, it's better to paraphrase the quote. Right now the article looks large portions of it were constructed through copy and paste, which can become a plagiarism issue (even if it's otherwise cited). This is present throughout the article, but WP:RECEPTION gives some advice on how to avoid this in reception sections specifically.
    OK, I removed some of the quotes and rewrote others. I mostly left in quotes that describe the subjective je ne sais quoi of the various songs, as that allows me to talk about what they're 'like' without dabbling in original research.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 14:03, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    Better, though I personally would have replaced a little more of the quotation, particularly under reception to replace it with brief summaries of what the critics commented on. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 20:16, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Spot checks:

  • [5] Qureshi – Does this support that "Lies" was released on 9 May? Because it looks like that's just when the news article was published. This source also can't support the details of the album's overall release, since it was published before the release took place. These details could have changed between May and August. All I know from this source is that they planned to release it on 12 August, not that they actually did so.
    The article came out the same day as the single (if you go to the YouTube video, you'll see that it was released on 9 May). To the second part of your comment, I just swapped the citation with the Apple Music ref that explicitly states the release date.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 21:19, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • [17] DeCaro – Good.
  • [29] Major – Good.
  • [31] Price – Good.
  • [67] Clayton-Lea – Good.
Broad in its coverage

Covers the standard aspects of an album: production, music, release, and reception.

Neutral

No neutrality issues. Due weight is maintained throughout the article.

Stable

No recent disputes.

Illustrated

The album cover has a valid non-free use rationale. All other images appear to be correctly tagged as Creative Commons.