Talk:Walter de Gray/GA1
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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 10:50, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]You won't be getting much input from me – just a few tiny stylistic points and one (probably very silly) question.
- Lead
- "Lord Chancellor under from 1205 to 1214" – either one word too many or not quite enough.
- "present at the signing of Magna Carta in 1215" – this is my question: was Magna Carta signed (or even sealed, for that matter)? I have, or think I have, a memory from a fairly recent visit to the display at the British Library that the charter was agreed but neither signed nor sealed. Perfectly prepared to be told I'm wrong, as I need hardly say.
- Early life
- "Gray was likely born around 1180" – A small Engvar point: in BrE "Gray was likely born" would normally be "Gray was probably born". Lord knows why we go for the longer, flabbier word, but there it is.
- "once more traveled outside of England" – "travelled" in BrE. And we'd usually just travel outside England, rather than outside of it.
- Royal service under Henry III
- "guardian of England when the King went to France" – I think this is the one place in the article where "King" ought to be "king".
- As archbishop
- "assert his archiepiscopal authority over Scotland, which not only resisted by the Scots" – word missing.
And that's all I can come up with. I shan't bother putting the review on hold (unless you wish it). Over to you and then on to the ribbon-cutting. – Tim riley talk 10:50, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
- I think I got all these - I went with "when Magna Carta was issued"... as for the King/king issue - I'm sure that shortly someone will come along and change it back as part of the endless capitalization wars ... I tend to just let them flow around me mostly ... it's not something I'm going to get up in arms about. Thank you for the review! Ealdgyth (talk) 14:02, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
- Good. All fine now. Sails through GAN. Tim riley talk 16:05, 21 May 2022 (UTC)