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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 20:48, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
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Will take this on tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 20:48, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you, Kyle. I would also like to invite you to comment at Trainor's featured article nomination should you find some time later.--NØ 07:51, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Cover art needs alt text
- Writer(s) and Producer(s) should be bullet points instead of hlist
- WP:OVERLINK of Meghan Trainor in the infobox
- "and American singer-songwriter" → "and singer-songwriter"
- "Kaskade co-wrote the track with" → "Kaskade and Trainor co-wrote the track with"
- "Richard Beynon and Thomas Shaw, and" → "Richard Beynon, and Thomas Shaw, while Kaskade"
- "Released on June 14, 2019," → "Released as a single on June 14, 2019," with the appropriate target
- "it is an electropop song and lyrically talks about" → "the song is an electropop track. The lyrics talk about"
- "The song received positive reviews from critics." there are not enough reviews to back up this claim
- "Commercially, it reached" → "Commercially, "With You" reached"
- "additionally managing to reach" → "additionally managing to enter"
- ""With You" received an animated video as well as an official" → "An animated video was released for it, as well as a" with the target
- "a Remix EP featuring" → "a Remix EP, featuring"
- "Loris Cimino and Dexter," → "Loris Cimino, and Dexter,"
Background and promotion
[edit]- Retitle to Background and release
- Remove wikilink on Kaskade
- "Gorgon City and Roméo" → "Gorgon City, and Roméo"
- "He co-wrote "With You"" → "Him and Trainor co-wrote "With You""
- "Richard Beynon and Thomas Shaw, and" → "Richard Beynon, and Thomas Shaw, while Kaskade"
- "Kaskade enlisted Meghan Trainor as" → "Kaskade enlisted Trainor as"
- "the track, and said that" → "the track, saying that"
- "yes for me. I knew we could" → "yes for me". He continued, stating that he knew they "could"
- "While the former stated that" → "Trainor stated that"
- [3][4] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
- Wikilink social media to itself
- "on June 10, 2019.[5] A snippet" → "on June 10, 2019, while a snippet"
- [5][6] should both be solely at the end of the sentence in new order
- "and streaming on June 14" → "and streaming as a single on June 14 of that year"
- "to contemporary hit radio in Italy" → "to contemporary hit radio as a single in Italy"
- "June 28, and the US" → "June 28, and the United States"
- "and Epic Records respectively" → "and Epic Records, respectively"
- "in the latter country on August 5, 2019" → "as a single in the US on August 5, 2019"
- "Columbia Records released a Remix EP" → "Columbia released a Remix EP"
- "featuring remixes of it" → "including remixes of it"
- "Loris Cimino and Dexter" → "Loris Cimino, and Dexter"
Composition and reception
[edit]- Wikilink tempo to itself
- "sending her mixed signals" → "delivering mixed signals to her"
- "she could be using her time better" → "she could be making better usage of her time"
- "song finds her" → "song finds Trainor
- Target chorus to Refrain
- Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
- Target digestibility to Digestion
- "it, and that" → "it and that"
- Target synth to Synthesizer
- Remove Radio.com since that is literally the only review cited here; the other two are just explaining the composition
- "reached number 15 on the" → "reached number 15 on the Billboard"
- "on the Adult Top 40 chart," → "on the Adult Top 40 chart."
- "and numbers 12 and 31" → "It further peaked at number 12 and 31"
- "charts respectively" → "charts, respectively"
- "It earned a number 46 placement on the Year-end" → "The song ranked at number 46 on the year-end US"
- "chart, and additionally charted" → "chart for 2019, while additionally charted"
Promotion
[edit]- Retitle to Music videos and promotion, since the Live performance subsection is one sentence which can go in the last para of the merged sub-sections
Music videos
[edit]- "An accompanying animated video for "With You" was" → "An accompanying animated video was" with the target
- "explore a psychedelic outer space. It commences" → "explore a psychedelic outer space and the video commences"
- Sure there isn't any appropriate target for psychedelic?
- "controlling a spaceship and crashing" → "controlling a spaceship that she crashes"
- "rocky terrain which is populated" → "rocky terrain, which is populated"
- "mystical superpowers, and Trainor can cast" → "mystical superpowers and Trainor is able to cast"
- "eyes, which grow trees" → "eyes that grow trees"
- Remove target on Billboard
- "described it as" → "described the music video as"
- Entertainment Tonight Canada should be italicised
- Wikilink technicolor to itself
- "the official music video was released" → "the music video for "With You" was released"
- "Idolator's Mike Wass described the visuals" → "Wass described the visuals of it"
- "as she was" → "stating that she was"
- Add the live performance sentence straight after the above one in the same para
Live performance
[edit]- "Kaskade and Trainor performed "With You" for the first time, on Today, on September 13, 2019." → "On September 13, 2019, Kaskade and Trainor performed "With You" on Today for further promotion."
Track listing
[edit]- Good
Personnel
[edit]- Retitle to Credits and personnel
- Wikilink Meghan Trainor to herself
Charts
[edit]Weekly charts
[edit]- See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Year-end charts
[edit]- See above
Release history
[edit]- See MOS:TABLECAPTION
- Format → Format(s)
- The refs should all be centered
- Remixes → Remix EP
References
[edit]- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- Copyvio score looks alright at 32.4%
- Cite Your EDM as publisher instead for ref 1
- Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead for refs 5 and 14, but keep no wikilink on 14
- Cite Radio Date as the publisher for ref 8
- Cite Apple Music of numerous countries for ref 11 to verify that the release was indeed various
- Wikilink Record Report to itself on ref 21
- Cite Entertainment Tonight Canada as work/website instead for refs 24 and 26, but keep no wikilink on 26
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold, nice article that needs some improvements. --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:27, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
- I have gone ahead and done everything. I added a couple more reviews and kept the line about the song receiving "positive reviews", and the stuff from Radio.com.--NØ 09:41, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
- MaranoFan You will need to add another review to verify that it was positive since three is not enough and mention what was praised in the lead, plus I have split the Composition and reception section for you. Also, add a third citation under the various release... maybe Venezuela or China if they have Apple Music; if not that then some popular place like Australia. --Kyle Peake (talk) 12:13, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
- Done.--NØ 12:26, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks, ✓ Pass! --Kyle Peake (talk) 13:43, 24 June 2020 (UTC)