Talk:World War I Memorial (East Providence, Rhode Island)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 11:26, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the confusion, this is where I meant to write the review for the nomination, not of the nomination for West Cornwall Covered Bridge. — Calvin999 19:58, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I think United States should be added to the lead and info box, because a lot of people won't necessarily know where Rhode Island is.

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk)

Which leads me on to perhaps a map of the US being included in the info box to give a geographical location of Rhode Island itself?

I do not know how to make such a map and it is not a requirement. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Why isn't the designer's name in the info box? Does a parameter not exist?

Maybe the Sculptor tag is defunct? I do not know it is in there. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Quotations in the lead need to have an inline citation after it.

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

, particularly in New York were → Comma after New York

Fixed.

the war dead → Does this mean people who died in the war? If so, which war?

For a World War I Memorial... the war dead applies to World War I. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The success this the earlier → Doesn't make sense

Fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Do we know what gave them reason to call the original design too brutal?

No, but it is not hard to imagine why. Though in such sculpture it is a more brutal depiction. You can liken it to a statue of the Terminator in a power pose except this is a memorial... it is pretty intense whereas most others are somber and peaceful. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Onorato describes the sculpture → Who is this?

Fixed ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

sculpture as, → I don't think a comma is needed here.

Fixed ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The front relief is states → Doesn't make sense

Fixed ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It was added to the National Register of Historic Places on October 19, 2001. → Source?

Linked it. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The references use different date formats. Pick one and be consistent with it.

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome

On hold for 7 days. Neat article. — Calvin999 19:52, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately, I'm failing this article. 7 days has passed since I placed the article on hold. No response or acknowledgment from the nominator, and the nominator has been very inactive. Act on my suggestions above and I'm sure it will pass next time. — Calvin999 07:57, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Calvin999: - I was busy with life. Fixes done before the end of the 7 day period though. Please check it. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

After checking at GAN, it is okay for me to remove the failed template and replaced with passed template. — Calvin999 17:33, 26 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]