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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:11, 30 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:11, 30 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • No DABs, two dead links.
    • Fixed the DANFS links
  • Images appropriately licensed.
  • Move boilers to power parameter. Shp is duplicated.
    • Fixed - don't think I remembered to clean up the infobox
  • Suggest moving the note entry in the infobox to the header like so: (as built)
  • No hyphen Wyoming-class in the lede. Conversely, add one here: twin gun
  • significantly more powerful 14 in (356 mm) gun, but it would have entailed significant delays One too many "significant/ly" in close proximity.
    • Fixed the second one
  • and required extensive improvements to accommodate What kind of improvements? Infrastructure? Or ship design things?
    • Clarified
  • Improved deck armor or just more of it?
    • Good point.
  • By 1944, she had been assigned Howzabout "was" in lieu of the passive verbiage?
    • How about "served"?
  • Link fire support and bombardment vessel, mainmast
    • Linked
  • with casemates in the main deck "on", I think, rather than "in"
    • Fixed
  • Can you add a line drawing? More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:35, 1 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • I looked for one when I wrote it, but I haven't been able to find anything.
  • destroyed ventilation system Ventilation or exhaust?
    • Good point.
  • transverse metacentric height Transverse? AFAIK, it's just plain metacentric.
    • You can have a longitudinal metacentric height as well (see here - it's not as commonly mentioned, but Groener usually includes both so I got in the habit of specifying.
  • Watch for duplicate links.
    • Fixed now
  • which was 8 ft (2.4 m) wide High is preferable, I think.
    • Sounds fine to me
  • Arkansas received her reconstruction watch for passive voice--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:10, 1 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]