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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:28, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:59, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
Another one of your interesting articles :) I'll post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:28, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
that are held for longer periods of time
Makes me wonder longer compared to what
- Fixed.
Traditional Chinese Medicine
Why in capitalized case?
- Lower case it is.
the tendons, fasciae, and ligaments
Could use some links here
- Added.
- Why so many refs in the lead? Anything from here missing in the main text?
- Moved 'em out.
- 'Yin Yoga' appears a bit too much in the lead, especially the last para
- Slimmed down.
- In the lead 'Taoist Yoga' needs to be linked on first mention and the other name 'Tao yin' used in the main text could probably be added here as well.
- Linked first mention and added other name.
yin-style poses
What exactly are those? Is it the same asyin asanas—mostly sitting or lying postures
? This explanation should then come earlier in the article
- Reworded.
- Not sure why we have 2 paras in Roots in India and China
- Closed up.
Taoist Alchemy
Why does alchemy start with 'A'?
- Fixed.
Earth, Metal, Water, Wood, and Fire
Should these start with capital letters?
- Yes, as these are the names of traditional elements.
The yoga teacher Paul Grilley sought Zink out and studied with him
When was this?
- Added.
- Who is Garry Parker?
- Glossed.
Japanese scholar and yogi
'yogi' is a Sanskrit word giving the impression of a hermit, and I'm not sure everyone will grasp what it means.. should we say yoga practitioner instead?
- Not really, but done.
meridians, or subtle pathways and vessels
A link for meridian would be good as in the lead
- Done.
parallel concepts of the nadi pathways
nadi is in italics here but not in the lead
- Formatted.
- Duplinks - Chinese medicine (Paul Grilley), hatha yoga (Yin and yang)
- Removed.
Because yin yoga does not make practitioners hot
it needs to be 'Yin Yoga' consistently
- Done.
- Two pics in the gallery at the bottom lack inline citations
- Added.
- The date formats in refs could be more consistent (dmy/mdy, just year or just month or full date)
- Done.
- URL in ref 4 is not working
- Removed.
- ref. 37 needs page numbers
- Replaced ref.
That's all I guess. Another lovely read :) Sainsf (talk · contribs) 14:02, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks!
- Nice work. 2 GAs in a day :D Sainsf (talk · contribs) 16:04, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks!