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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 19:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 19:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)
- Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:12, 10 September 2022 (UTC)
Images are appropriately tagged. Earwig finds no issues; the overlap it does find is with a wiki that has evidently copied part of the article.
- Noted.
The Godefroy PDF (FN 8) is hosted on myreussite.com. I can't tell if the site is reliable, but if it's just hosting the PDF then what makes Godefroy reliable?
- We aren't relying on Christian Godefroy for anything more than a quotation from Boyes, but he was a published author of self-help books.
- What makes the following reliable sources?
revue3emillenaire.com -- appears to be a blog- It's the website of a regularly published magazine, they are up to number 144 now.
- healthysuccessreviews.com -- the link is broken and the site is down, at least temporarily; this archive about page doesn't give enough information for it to be clearly reliable.
- Added archive link.
- OK, but why is it reliable? Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- OK, cited YJ directly; it's modern yoga's journal of record.
- Added archive link.
yoganidranetwork.org -- seems to be a blog- Uma Dinsmore-Tuli is a well-known practitioner and spokesperson on yoga. She is discussed in detail in Theo Wildcroft's book Post-Lineage Yoga.
- OK -- it's about what the posters of the blog believe, so it's a reliable source for that. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- Uma Dinsmore-Tuli is a well-known practitioner and spokesperson on yoga. She is discussed in detail in Theo Wildcroft's book Post-Lineage Yoga.
I think the lead could be expanded by a sentence or two.
- Done.
Lots of short paragraphs in the first couple of sections; can any of them be joined?
- Done.
In Satyananda's eight stages, sankalpa appears to show up twice -- perhaps giving an English word for the second occurrence, as you've done for the first occurrence, would resolve this?
- Satyananda had it in there twice, i.e. it was practised twice in every session. I've repeated the English translation.
- I made the same edit to the text. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- Satyananda had it in there twice, i.e. it was practised twice in every session. I've repeated the English translation.
The "Earlier practices" column in the table doesn't appear to be sourced -- as far as I can tell the source for the notes column doesn't always apply.
- The material is carefully paraphrased from Ref [2]: EP#1 covered in its section on "Preparation". EP#2 covered in "Resolve". EP#3 covered in "Rotation of consciousness". EP#4 is blank. EP#5 covered in "Feelings and sensations". EP#6 covered in "Visualisation". EP #7 as per #2.
- And I see 2 is cited in the title; I think I missed that. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- The material is carefully paraphrased from Ref [2]: EP#1 covered in its section on "Preparation". EP#2 covered in "Resolve". EP#3 covered in "Rotation of consciousness". EP#4 is blank. EP#5 covered in "Feelings and sensations". EP#6 covered in "Visualisation". EP #7 as per #2.
Spotchecks:
FN 22 cites "Based on this work, the Surgeon General of the United States Army endorsed Yoga Nidra as a complementary alternative medicine (CAM) for chronic pain in 2010": I can see it was endorsed as a CAM, but I can't find support for "Based on this work" -- can you provide a page number? And maybe add pages to the citation; this isn't easily verifiable as the document is not short.
- Removed the phrase, added page range.
FN 13 cites "This state of consciousness is different from meditation, in which concentration on a single focus is required.": the source says it's different but doesn't talk about a single focus being required for meditation. That's not controversial but I imagine it's easy to cite, so I would add a cite for that.
- Added.
- FN 8 cites "In the book, Boyes makes use of relaxation techniques including the direction of attention to each part of the body": verified.
- Noted.
-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 20:35, 10 September 2022 (UTC)
Just the one source question left. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
Last fix is good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:37, 11 September 2022 (UTC)