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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 19:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 19:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:12, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Images are appropriately tagged. Earwig finds no issues; the overlap it does find is with a wiki that has evidently copied part of the article.

  • Noted.
  • The Godefroy PDF (FN 8) is hosted on myreussite.com. I can't tell if the site is reliable, but if it's just hosting the PDF then what makes Godefroy reliable?
  • We aren't relying on Christian Godefroy for anything more than a quotation from Boyes, but he was a published author of self-help books.
  • What makes the following reliable sources?
    • revue3emillenaire.com -- appears to be a blog
      • It's the website of a regularly published magazine, they are up to number 144 now.
    • healthysuccessreviews.com -- the link is broken and the site is down, at least temporarily; this archive about page doesn't give enough information for it to be clearly reliable.
  • I think the lead could be expanded by a sentence or two.
  • Done.
  • Lots of short paragraphs in the first couple of sections; can any of them be joined?
  • Done.
  • In Satyananda's eight stages, sankalpa appears to show up twice -- perhaps giving an English word for the second occurrence, as you've done for the first occurrence, would resolve this?
  • The "Earlier practices" column in the table doesn't appear to be sourced -- as far as I can tell the source for the notes column doesn't always apply.
  • The material is carefully paraphrased from Ref [2]: EP#1 covered in its section on "Preparation". EP#2 covered in "Resolve". EP#3 covered in "Rotation of consciousness". EP#4 is blank. EP#5 covered in "Feelings and sensations". EP#6 covered in "Visualisation". EP #7 as per #2.
    And I see 2 is cited in the title; I think I missed that. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Spotchecks:

  • FN 22 cites "Based on this work, the Surgeon General of the United States Army endorsed Yoga Nidra as a complementary alternative medicine (CAM) for chronic pain in 2010": I can see it was endorsed as a CAM, but I can't find support for "Based on this work" -- can you provide a page number? And maybe add pages to the citation; this isn't easily verifiable as the document is not short.
  • Removed the phrase, added page range.
  • FN 13 cites "This state of consciousness is different from meditation, in which concentration on a single focus is required.": the source says it's different but doesn't talk about a single focus being required for meditation. That's not controversial but I imagine it's easy to cite, so I would add a cite for that.
  • Added.
  • FN 8 cites "In the book, Boyes makes use of relaxation techniques including the direction of attention to each part of the body": verified.
  • Noted.

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 20:35, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Just the one source question left. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Last fix is good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:37, 11 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]