Template talk:Did you know nominations/Myrthen

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... that Myrthen (Myrtles), a song cycle of 26 lieder in four books, was a wedding gift by Robert Schumann to his bride Clara? [2023-09-13 at 11:42:38, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that Myrthen (Myrtles), a song cycle of 26 lieder in four books, was composed by Robert Schumann as a wedding gift for his bride Clara? [2023-09-13 at 11:43:58, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 12:25, 13 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Accepted. Storye book (talk) 16:49, 14 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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... that Myrthen (Myrtles), a song cycle of 26 lieder in four books, was composed by Robert Schumann as a wedding gift for his bride Clara? [2023-09-16 at 21:26:22, by Theleekycauldron]
... that Robert Schumann composed Myrthen (Myrtles) as a wedding gift for his bride, Clara? [2023-09-16 at 21:47:50, by Theleekycauldron]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 22:25, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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... that when the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) was dedicated by Robert Schumann to Clara, Eric Sams asked, "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift? [2023-09-28 at 22:24:14, by AirshipJungleman29]
... ... that "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" was asked by Eric Sams about the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) that Robert Schumann dedicated to his fiancée Clara (pictured)? [2023-09-28 at 22:25:16, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" was asked by Eric Sams about the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) that Robert Schumann dedicated to his fiancée Clara (pictured)? [2023-09-28 at 22:25:28, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" was asked by Eric Sams about the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) that Robert Schumann dedicated to his fiancée Clara? [2023-09-28 at 22:25:44, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 23:25, 28 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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... that "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" was asked by Eric Sams about the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) that Robert Schumann dedicated to his fiancée Clara? [2023-09-28 at 22:31:31, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that Eric Sams remarked "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" of the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles), which Robert Schumann dedicated to his fiancée Clara? [2023-09-29 at 04:28:34, by Ravenpuff]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 05:25, 29 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Rephrase accepted. I agree that "asked" can be changed to "remarked", because the question is rhetorical. Storye book (talk) 09:56, 29 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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... that when the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) was dedicated by Robert Schumann to Clara, Eric Sams asked, "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift? [2023-10-31 at 17:32:11, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" was asked by Eric Sams about the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) that Robert Schumann dedicated to Clara (pictured)? [2023-10-31 at 17:32:46, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that "what bride ever had a finer wedding gift?" was asked by Eric Sams about the song collection Myrthen (Myrtles) that Robert Schumann dedicated to Clara? [2023-10-31 at 17:33:01, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 18:26, 31 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Confirming that I have seen the above changes, and that they are factually correct. However, while all of the above three alternatives contain the same facts, the first of the three is in elegant English, that is - clear, concise and to the point while running with a logical smoothness. But the syntax of the last one is awkward and clumsy. Why insert "was asked by" and "about", when that extra hiccup of verbiage is not needed by the first option of the three? Storye book (talk) 18:53, 31 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]