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User:Kmol2023/Ruth Kajander/Iwishmycatcouldtalk Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Kmol2023

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Kmol2023/Ruth Kajander
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Looks like this is a brand new article!

Lead

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Since it looks like she was a member of the Order of Canada, she's entitled to have the little "CM" or "OC" next to her name (depending on what grade she was a part of).

The lead looks good to me- I know there are plenty of articles with long leads but since these articles are so short, I think keeping it really simple is okay.

Content

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I know you may be limited by your sources- I certainly was. However, there are a few things I want to know that I was hoping maybe you could find?

  1. Who was she married to? Where does the name Kajander come from?
  2. Where did she go to school? Was this in Germany or Canada?
  3. What year did she start using the drug in London? (Also, I assume this was this hospital in London, Ontario? Victoria Hospital (London, Ontario) The article as it is now reads a little like she moved to England.)

Tone and Balance

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I think the tone is great. Reads like a regular Wikipedia article to me.

Organization

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I think the spelling and grammar looks good. The way the article is organized is good too, though I wish there was a little bit more under early life to balance it out.

Some things I would crosslink:

Chlorpromazine

Schizophrenia

Göttingen

Internship (medicine)

Lakeridge Health Oshawa

Preanesthetic agent

Heinz Lehmann

Ontario Medical Association

Order of Canada

Images and Media

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That photo of her from her obituary is so cool! Do you think there's a way you could find the copyright owner and get permission to use it?

For New Articles Only

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Here are some ideas for places you could add links to your new page so it's not an orphan (though this might be a little complex, but since your article is pretty good quality, I'm sure you'll be just fine):

On the page for Chlorpromazine

Lists of Canadians, Göttingen (under notable people) or List of people from Oshawa?

Overall impressions

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It's cool that you did an article from scratch!