User:Paulhuit/sandbox

Proposed change 1:

Allergen immunotherapy, also known as desensitization or hypo-sensitization, is a medical treatment for ~~some types of allergies. It is useful for~~ environmental allergies, such as ~~allergies to~~ insect bites, and asthma.^[1] The benefits of oral immunotherapy for food allergies have been demonstrated by successful treatment of thousands of patients both in private practice and in studies for the past few decades, primarily in the United States. Immunotherapy involves exposing people to larger and larger amounts of allergen in an attempt to change the immune system's response.^{[citation needed]}

Proposed change 2:

Discovered by Leonard Noon and John Freeman in 1911, allergen immunotherapy is the only medicine known to tackle not only the symptoms but also the causes of respiratory allergies.^{[citation needed]} A detailed diagnosis is necessary to identify the allergens involved. As of September 2015, the use of allergen immunotherapy for food allergies is not recommended in most cases due to the high risk of serious adverse effects and a lack of evidence to suggest it results in lasting changes in reactivity to food allergens.^[1]

^ ^a ^b "International consensus on allergy immunotherapy". Journal of Allergy and Clinical Immunology. 136 (3): 556–568. 2015-09-01. doi:10.1016/j.jaci.2015.04.047. ISSN 0091-6749.

Comment[edit]

Good work here. I like how you indicated how you propose to change the text. Make sure that the citations go immediately after the punctuation like this.¹

Avoid the use of words that reference an unspecified time (i.e.:currently) as per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch#Relative time references

Are the bolded words linked/re-directs? Please add these right into your sandbox so we know that the formatting is correct.

Nice use of high quality MEDRS source.

JenOttawa (talk) 03:38, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback!
- I have updated the use of the word currently to the time of the article
- The bolded words are not links/or redirects, but simply bolded
Paulhuit (talk) 15:39, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

[:0-1] "International consensus on allergy immunotherapy". Journal of Allergy and Clinical Immunology. 136 (3): 556–568. 2015-09-01. doi:10.1016/j.jaci.2015.04.047. ISSN 0091-6749.

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