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Northern Territory Emergency Response

Wikipedia Quality - Good[edit]

Wikipedia Quality - Good	Rate from 1/10	Explain your rating
The lead section is understandable	8	Clear and concise. Gives a good overview of the Intervention.
The structure is clear	7	The structure is good and has a good flow to it although there could be a section added after the lead section that gives more detail on the background of the Intervention and how and why it started.
Good balance	5	The criticism and support sections outweigh one another. The criticisms are summarised together in a short section whereas the support section involves more detail. This may be due to bias by whoever has written it.
Coverage is neutral	7	Provides the facts from a neutral perspective, does not target a specific audience, and discusses an Indigenous matter respectfully. Although as stated above, there seems to be bias present in the criticisms and supports sections.
Reliable sources	8	There are many great sources used (legislation and government websites however there are also many newspaper articles and although they are relevant, they could have bias. Also gives a list further reading materials that are relevant to the topic.

Wikipedia Quality - Bad[edit]

Wikipedia Quality - Bad	Rate from 1/10	Explain your rating
Has a warning banner on top	N/A	There is no warning banner
Language problems in lead section	6	The lead section provides a great overview of the Intervention. However, I believe the word ‘Aboriginal’ should be replaced with ‘Indigenous Australians’ as a form of acknowledgement and respect for Indigenous peoples.
Unsourced opinion & value statements	0	Opinions that are given have been cited.
Too general statements	0	No general statements.
Aspects of the topic are missing	6	There is definitely room for more information to be added. For example, elaborating more on the fact that the Gillard Government replaced the Intervention act with another and that some of the Intervention’s policies are still in place today.
Overly long relative to importance	0	The length of the article is just of right length in accordance with the importance of the topic. The article involves everything about the Intervention to provide a broad overview of the topic and to understand what the Intervention is.
Few references or lacks footnotes	1	There is an adequate amount of references that are credible and reliable.
Hostile dialogue in talk page	0	There are only a couple of recommendations in the talk page and they are written in a friendly and non-aggressive way.

Minor Editing[edit]

Northern Territory Emergency Response

Original[edit]

The Northern Territory National Emergency Response, also known as "The Intervention" and sometimes the abbreviation "NTER" (for Northern Territory Emergency Response) began with a media release by Mal Brough, Minister for Indigenous Affairs on 21 June 2007.^[1] The media release served as ministerial regulation to implement a taskforce of eminent Australians, led by Magistrate Sue Gordon, chair of the National Indigenous Council. The role of the Taskforce was to oversee a list of at least 12 measures in the Northern Territory, which included discriminatory changes to welfare, compulsory health checks for all Aboriginal children, the acquisition of Aboriginal townships, and banning alcohol and pornography in prescribed Aboriginal communities. The measures also included increased policing with assistance from other jurisdictions; calling in the army for logistics and surveillance; appointing managers to all government business in designated communities; and improving housing, but establishing market-based rents for public housing.^[1]

Edited[edit]

The Northern Territory National Emergency Response, also known as "The Intervention" and sometimes the abbreviation "NTER" (for Northern Territory Emergency Response) began with a media release by Mal Brough, Minister for Indigenous Affairs on 21 June 2007 after the public release of the Little Children are Sacred report on 15 June 2007.^[1] The media release served as ministerial regulation to implement a task force of eminent Australians, led by Magistrate Sue Gordon, chair of the National Indigenous Council. The role of the Taskforce was to oversee a list of at least 12 measures in the Northern Territory, which included discriminatory changes to welfare, compulsory health checks for all Indigenous Australian children, the acquisition of Indigenous townships, and banning alcohol and pornography in prescribed Indigenous communities. The measures also included increased policing with assistance from other jurisdictions, calling in the army for logistics and surveillance, appointing managers to all government business in designated communities, and improving housing; but establishing market-based rents for public housing.^[1]