User talk:Afg110
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[edit]Hello, Afg110, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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Peer Review of Archaeology of Pemba Island
[edit]Hi Afg110, I like the way you divided your sections. Keeping it broken up between years is a smart way to show a timeline for this location. Even though I do like the division, I think you should have more sections in your article as well. This does not mean that you need more separate sections but, maybe putting in subsections will help organize your thoughts even more. Since you mention archaeobotanical evidence and pottery evidence, those could each be subsections within your section. Also, I am not sure how many resources there are about this topic but, having more than three will also help create a better article. Lastly, since the name of sites can be a bit confusing to decipher when written in a sentence, it might be a good idea to make each location a subsection to keep them a bit more separated and less confusing to the reader. So really what I am trying to say is either have subsections for dividing the type of evidence that was found, or have subsections that divide the locations within Pemba Island.
I would recommend: 1) adding a picture to get a better idea about where your location is. 2) explain more about actual pieces of evidence found at the site. 3) show how you can see the influence of Islam through the means of material culture and not just what happened since this is an article about the archaeology and not just the history.
I really enjoy your article and I think you have a great start. I think adding subsections will help you move forward and realize what you all need to add. MatildaStar (talk) 01:26, 16 November 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]I think you have a really nice start. What I like most about your page is the flow. All of the information you have added seems relevant to all the other information. I also like how you explain why the information you found is important to understanding the people who lived on Pemba Island. I do think you need some more information. Also, while I really like the way you've presented your information, it could seem a bit like an essay. Maybe go through and make sure it sounds encyclopedic (I will be spending hours doing this). I would also suggest adding some pictures. Show the reader where Pemba Island is. You could also, perhaps look into the history of archaeology on the island. When did it start and by whom? Really nice job! TutyFruity (talk) 03:19, 16 November 2016 (UTC)TutyFruity
Article feedback
[edit]You've made an excellent start on your article Archaeology of Pemba Island. I wanted to give you some feedback on some aspects. Your article should begin with a summary of the entire article which clearly establishes the topic of discussion, with the article title in bold text. Also, consider adding some relevant images to the article. You can use images from Wikimedia Commons or find images to upload yourself following the steps at the Finding images tutorial. See our module Contributing Images and Media Files for more information on how to properly find and use images on Wikipedia. Please let me know if you have any questions. Rob (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:23, 22 November 2016 (UTC)