User talk:Angelsu52
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[edit]Hello, Angelsu52, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:05, 30 September 2020 (UTC)
Classmate Introduction
[edit]Hi Angel, my name is Veronica, I am a classmate in Com 482. I am learning how to use Wikipedia so I am introducing myself on your user talk page!Vpritchard (talk) 03:56, 9 October 2020 (UTC)
Welcome!
[edit]Welcome Angelsu52 (again!) to both Wikipedia and to COM482! I saw that you picked Haidilao. Although the article is a stub, you can see that the article is quite advanced compared to many other stubs. As a result, so you might need to dig a bit deeper to make significant improvement to the article. Look at the talk page of the article (Talk:Haidilao) for related WikiProjects that will have links to excellent articles on similar topics which should point you at templates and examples of how to improve the article. I'm looking forward to seeing watching the article develop over the next week. —mako๛ 14:30, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
Heads Up
[edit]Hello Angel. This is Paul. I just wanted to gives you a heads up that I added a comment on your article.
PaulSereeyothin (talk) 07:39, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
Feedback on your draft
[edit]Greetings Angelsu52! I've done a quick pass on User:Angelsu52/Haidilao. I had some feedback:
- You've added a bunch of new text and most of that seems solid. The new references are great. The information about the IPO seems encyclopedic.
- The article was tagged as sounding like an advertisement (see WP:ADVERT). I was hoping that your edits could help make the previous text more neutral. If you can, I still think you should do that!
- Some of the new text that you've added seems to suffer from the same section. For example, the phrase "Haidilao's success is also due to its well-known superior customer service" sounds like it something that would be on the company's website. Can you provide a reference or, better yet, just remove this or replace it with something that sounds more neutral?
Why don't you go ahead, do a final pass to clean up that stuff, and then start moving things over to live version. If you want to make more changes to the article, you can just make those changes it in the live version. If you want me to take another look, feel free to ping me and I'll be happy to do so. Good luck and thanks for your work on the article! —mako๛ 20:28, 4 November 2020 (UTC)
- So many useful comments here, thank you for engaging this student @Angelsu52: please be sure to engage with these editors and continue to build on the article as per the instructions and the feedback on your Draft article. Remember WP:PROMOTION and WP:W2W as well. Carrolquadrio (talk) 06:30, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
Smile at others by adding {{subst:Smile}} to their talk page with a friendly message.
Thank you so much Angel, I am Mewgulfszd, your advice of haidilao is very useful. would you mind to help me to look through the article again, if you have time. Thank you!