User talk:Angelsu52/Haidilao

Peer Review

Hi Angel,

I really love that you chose Hai Di Lao as your topic, I've never tried this restaurant but I've heard a lot great things about it so I want to try it sometime soon!!!

You did a great job adding substantial and relevant information to your topic. Most notably is your up-to-date information (by updating stats and info from this year, 2020). This is very important because you're helping to keep this topic updated on Wikipedia. I think you did well in maintaining the neutral tone and continuing to add relevant information to this topic. Especially having chosen a restaurant, your updated information is informative and neutrall. Like I mentioned earlier about your up-to-date changes (regarding the restaurant's status and growth in 2020), your citations/sources are current and reliable. The original article itself is pretty organized, but I think you did a great job building onto that organized structure by inserting sub sections that are appropriate placed.

Your additions to the articles definitely helped to make it more up-to-date and complete, since it seems like the restaurant has done a lot of growth and expansions. With that said, I think you could improve the article more by touching up more on the already existing content from the original article. When I was going through both the original article and your article, I think you can spend some time on proofreading and making the original content more precise.

Overall, great job! I'm excited to see the final product :)

@Angelsu52: Kimndo (talk) 06:01, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Sourcing

Hello Angel! I really liked how you decided to expand on the history section of the article, especially by expanding on Haidilao's "global market" and "IPO." I think that these paragraphs are a good transition from the first paragraph about the origins of Haidilao. In terms of your writing style, I could not have been any more please since you consistently kept a neutral tone throughout the entire content. In terms of what could be fixed, I would like you to watch out for sources like Wall Street Journal or Huffpost. According to what I found out on a bias-fact check site at least, it rated Wall Street Journal as a mostly factual, which isn't too high on the web's scale. As for Huffpost, it is rated as "mixed," which was worse. This is not to say that you were definitely incorrect in incorporating the sources but just that you should be wary just in case. Below are the links to the website that I used to check. Apart from this, keep up the great work!

Wall Street Journal: https://mediabiasfactcheck.com/wall-street-journal/ Huffpost: https://mediabiasfactcheck.com/wall-street-journal/

PaulSereeyothin (talk) 07:38, 24 October 2020 (UTC)