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Hello, Atb17, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:12, 3 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Minor edits

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What was his salary? What was his family life like as well as hobbies other than soccer? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jwood97 (talkcontribs) 14:45, 19 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Private Life

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Talk more about his love for football. How did he develop it? Heyballer (talk) 05:53, 19 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback on draft

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Hi, Atb17. I made some changes to your draft. First, I removed the outline and sources list at the top of the page. It's available in the page history (here's an old revision with the outline content) and I can move it to the talk page if that's easier, but eventually you'll want to move this draft into the mainspace and that outline won't need to be there. I also adjusted the section titles--Wikipedia sections aren't normally styled (i.e. bolded, italicized) unless they're naming something we already style (like a book title).

There are two changes I'd like to see before you move this into the mainspace:

  • Take a careful look at the article for tone and diction. For subjects like these, it's easy to adopt the somewhat breathless tone that many of the sources will--especially since many of those sources are the USA swim team and local papers writing about a pretty big achievement from a local athlete. Most of the article does a good job with this, with the "honors and awards" section being the biggest problem area. Here's one way to potentially resolve this. Right now the career section includes a brief overview of his HS and college career, but we reprise both in the awards section. Why not integrate what's in that section, since it represents the salient points of his early career, with the career section above and restrict the honors and awards section to just awards. I've made a first pass at exactly that here
  • Add a bit more data for your references. You can click on a reference to add information that the automatic citation tool may not catch like the author's first and last name and the date of publication (where such info is available). This helps other editors add to the article or figure out what you were referencing if and when the link dies

Thanks for your work so far. Looking forward to seeing this as an article in the mainspace! Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:08, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]