User talk:Christay817
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[edit]Hello, Christay817, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:44, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
Dec 1 check in
[edit]I'm not seeing any progress for the last few weeks. Where is your work plan, annotated bibliography, and 1000 words added to the article? Feel free to email me if you have questions.
After completing those, Next step is to peer review one of your classmate’s articles. Like your own, these should be on their sandbox pages. You should be able to see who is assigned each article on the Assigned Articles tab, so click on their username to find their sandbox. Remember, you had a training on this, which you can rely on. Feel free to email me if you have questions. --Theredproject (talk) 23:08, 1 December 2019 (UTC)
Feedback on your work so far.
[edit]Hi Christay817 As I mentioned in my email to you, I just checked and your edits and want to offer a few pieces of guidance that you will need to follow in order to haver your edits successfully posted without being reverted.
- Be careful about https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Neutral_point_of_view For example, the sentence "She is known for her great ability to turn any product vision into an immaculate plan." is like the kind of language you might see in a press release, or other highly promotional text.
- Cite all of your claims. Do you have a citation that says "She has a great ability to turn literally any product vision into a plan I would describe as nothing less than immaculate" ?? If so, maybe you could actually include it in your text. What is more likely is that you have something like "She is an experienced executive who develops games from idea to final product."
- You need to copyedit for grammar
You are going to need to work on this before your edits will be accepted. --Theredproject (talk) 15:08, 15 December 2019 (UTC)