User talk:Cpontell1/sandbox

Hello

Hi Cpontell1, I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've got a great start to your article, with good background information and a list of her works. Much of the information is cited and had most of the citation information (I made some minor tweaks for formatting and added the accessdate field to the templates).

You've got a good deal of information about Saffery, but it's a little confusing because it's not in a chronological flow - there's an early life section, but it has later life info (and vice versa for the personal life section). It would be good to have more information about her hymn and poem-writing, which helps identify why she is notable for a Wikipedia article and to draw the reader into the subject. You may want to look at Dorothe Engelbretsdotter or William Orcutt Cushing for examples of a few hymn writers

There are some more hymns that you may want to list on the hymnary.org site, which again gets to notability and rounds out the info about her a bit more.

I'll check in on you again, and I'll be watching this page if you have any questions or comments.--CaroleHenson (talk) 00:28, 1 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You may want to take a look at Janise Yntema for a sense of what an introduction or lede would look like. Wikipedia articles start with a "lead" section, which is a short summary of everything in the article. For some articles this summary can be a few paragraphs. Others (like Yntema's article and probably this one) can be a few sentences long.--CaroleHenson (talk) 03:51, 4 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]